User talk:Kylekaba/sandbox

Tae's review
I really like the key concepts section of this article. The original article is quite superficial in detail, but this section that you are creating has the potential to provide much-needed depth along with an easy to follow mathematical foundation. Moreover, I think that it would interesting for you add a subsection on some of the more common non-trivial potentials that are currently used in stellar dynamics research.

Overall, the article seems to flow well and it doesn't seem to contain biased or superfluous information.

Keep up the work!

- Tae

Sophia's Review/Suggestions
The changes made to the original article are substantial and very well done! Some suggestions:

Under Key Concepts: "The stars can be modeled as point masses whose orbits are determined by the combined interactions with each other." maybe change to "The stars can be modeled as point masses whose orbits are determined by their combined interactions." "For an N-body system, any individual member, {\displaystyle m_{i}} m_{i} in influenced by the gravitational potentials of the remaining {\displaystyle m_{j}} m_{j} members.", I think "in influenced" was intended to be "is influenced".

Under Relaxation: "The relaxation time can be thought as the time..." perhaps could read "The relaxation time can be thought of as the time..."

Under Connections to Statistical Mechanics and Plasma Physics: "For collisional systems, Liouville's theorem (Hamiltonian) to study the microstate of a stellar system, commonly used to study the different statistical ensembles of statistical mechanics." could be reworded as follows: "For collisional systems, Liouville's theorem (Hamiltonian) can be used to study the microstate of a stellar system, and is commonly used to study the different statistical ensembles of statistical mechanics." — Preceding unsigned comment added by Astropartigirl (talk • contribs) 22:14, 7 June 2018 (UTC)