User talk:LBuras/sandbox

I like the large edits that you are making to the existing page it looked like it needed a change, because it didn't seem to mention quantum at all.

That being said I'm going to review by section.

Mutation- I like the content that you added it's well worded. The only thing that I think needs work is I think you need to like this to quantum some how.

Repair- Good place to start but again this needs to be linked to quantum, like why does this matter to your topic.

the next two sections have the same comment. Good start just don't forget to relate back to the topic at hand

Good content and additions to the article in terms of adding quantum information. However, found a lot of grammar issues. I would re-read for smoothness in writing and transitions and add commas where necessary. "Tunneling" is spelt using only one "l." Try to avoid run-on sentences and starting sentences with "because."

Additionally, citations should be inside the period at the end of the sentence. If it is outside it causes confusion about which sentence it is referring to. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Baileyruesch (talk • contribs) 20:52, 12 November 2018 (UTC)

LBura's Peer Review
Strengths: Clear and concise Reliable sources used Good Amount of Content Neutral viewpoint

Weaknesses: Suggestion: Give a brief overview of the section and attach link to main article Original Edit: "Another theory suggests that the olfactory receptors detect the      vibration of the molecules that reach them and the “smell” is due to different       vibrational frequencies, this theory is aptly called the “Vibration Theory of       Olfaction.”   Suggested Edit: "The "Vibration Theory of Olfaction" suggests that the olfactory receptors detect the vibration of the molecules that reach them and the “smell” is due to different vibrational frequencies"
 * Sentence structure in DNA subsection "mutation" can be improved.
 * Suggest improving opening sentence in DNA Subsection "repair" by making it into two sentences instead of a run-on.
 * Ordering of citations (i.e. source 3 is cited before source 2)
 * "Vibration Theory of Olfraction" wiki article already exists: thorough details are not necessary since the theory is covered in main article.
 * Last sentence in 1st paragraph of "Vibration Theory of Olfaction"

Keep up the great work. BriannaKenney (talk) 00:48, 1 December 2018 (UTC) Brianna