User talk:Laura.griffin24/Pleistoannelida/Sallysir Peer Review

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Hi Laura (and team?) ! I think you did a great job on this and most of my comments are on sentence structure or grammar. I do think there is more than one member in this group so I am confused by there are only seven sentences but maybe I am just seeing Laura's work. Anyways here are my comments if you want to view them here as well.

The section titled, "Morphological Studies" was added. This seems to be relevant information based on the previous page. There are typos to look out for (Second sentence in this section says researched instead of research, pigments eyes might need to be pigmented eyes).

A few sentences were added to the introduction. Should papillae be capitalized like it is? The sentence starting with "The Pleistoannelida..." might be a run on sentence. Sentence that starts with furthermore has a type, "there" needs to be lowercase and should also say there has and not "there's". Hypothesis is not plural, need to fix that. change last sentence, "Currently three that were originally A PART of the groups Errantia and Sedentaria have..." Instead clarify what three you are talking about, three species? three orders? clarify.

A sentence is added to the Phylogeny section, this information seems necessary to include but needs a citation attached.

The image included is also nice, showing off some of the structures on the annelid.

Sometimes annelid is capitalized and sometimes it isn't, not sure which is correct but it needs to be consistent throughout (same goes for the word clade).

All of the information is relevant and should be added to the article (and is in the appropriate section) but there are some severe grammatical errors and errors with sentence structure. I recommend carefully and slowly rereading this.

Thanks,

Sallysir (talk) 20:16, 8 November 2023 (UTC)