User talk:Laurav.garciad/sandbox

Hey,

Overall I thought you did a really great job! This article had tons of good references and relevant links to other Wikipedia articles, and it was also very easy to read. However, I thought the formatting could have been different—I don't know if the bullet points were intentional as a lot of the article would have worked just fine just the way it is (except without the bullet points), but I definitely thought the article should have been in paragraph form. As well, I noted a couple instances of passive language and some italics that didn't seem to belong where they were. I also thought some of the sections could have been shuffled around in order (with the NetTALK part coming before connectionist approach).

Other than that, I really thought this article was well done. The picture was good and helpful, although maybe there could have been a table illustrating an example somewhere along the way. Good job!

Sykim22 (talk) 17:09, 3 April 2013 (UTC)

I think the article was really well done. There are many references that were provided that appear to be of a good quality. I agree with the other poster in wondering why the whole article was bulleted. I don't think it was necessary, seeing as it seems that it would flow pretty well without it. I like the fact that you included the advantages and disadvantages of NETTalk so that we have a very deep understanding of it. There are only a couple of aspects that you may want to develop.

I feel like there could be more previous research articles included. This article seems to be very description based and provides a great deal of information on what NETTalk is, and its pros and cons. However, I feel that more current research into the topic could be looked at as well. The only other thing would be to possibly increase the number of images or tables to break up the writing, since the article is very wordy.

However, overall, this is a really well-written article that teaches a lot about your topic.

Jpstudent (talk) 20:59, 3 April 2013 (UTC)

I changed the bullets. I did not think another diagram was necessary, as the one I provided is simple enough to understand what NETtalk is and throughout the article I provided links to other articles that have diagrams to other concepts that the reader might be interested it, but that are not necessary to understand the content of my article. Since I was not able to find recent research articles, I added a small paragraph to the "lasting impressions" part of my article in which I explain where I think the research is going to, and how it will be helping future research. I also did not change around the order of my article, as I thought it was essential to first explain what a connectionist model is before introducing the topic of NETtalk. Finally, I also fixed my references so that they are only shown once. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Laurav.garciad (talk • contribs) 03:22, 10 April 2013 (UTC)