User talk:Laurenfeiman/sandbox

Hi! Your sentences seem to be straight to the point and unbiased. The tone seems to be correct. The links do work and do lead to the right pages. Your citations seems to be correct as far as I can tell. They seem to support the article. There is no bias noted and the sources do seem reliable. Nothing confused me. But there could be stuff in missing, this wikipedia edit is complicated.... Joaquinjiron (talk) 23:23, 30 March 2018 (UTC)

Hi! Reading over your article edits, the added portions are informative and direct. I think you made edits to the portions of the article that really needed it, which is great. Under the "compared with extended family" section, there is a sentence that could be improved if you re-worded it (the one with the grandma example). The information is correct and the example is useful, but might be stronger to the article if it was a bit clearer. Also make sure to capitalize "America" in your additions. Aside from these minor grammar glitches, the additions made to the article will certainly improve it. Utilization of more sources could be beneficial; so far your edits look good, keep it up! :) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lmart12 (talk • contribs) 02:39, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review -Jaden Gordon
I enjoyed reading over your article edit and I believe that you made the changes necessary. I noticed that you did not have much of a bias towards any of it which is what I think we are supposed to maintain throughout this! I like how you used percentages to enhance your data for the reader. Additionally, you used a few sources to back up those facts so that seems terrific! One of the few suggestions I can make is that maybe you can tie all of that information into one Major point and maybe have an example of it handy for the reader. This was it will be easier to connect with you and more people will understand even better. — Preceding unsigned comment added by JadenGordon1 (talk • contribs) 19:04, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

Final Comments
Hi! Just wanted to look over your edits before the final due date, and I think the information you've added to this article is really great, and definitely improves the article. A useful addition relative to our course could maybe be the inclusion of how family structure is tied to age/sex structure and dependency ratio. Great job! Lmart12 (talk) 01:49, 11 April 2018 (UTC)

Comments
I really enjoyed your additions to the article! You really proved good information about how extended families help kids be healthier. Also, I like how you added information about women wanting to be successful for themselves nowadays and how it is difficult for the traditional mother. I like how you added statistics about single parents according to race which is a important piece of data. Maybe you could relate that to more statistics of white people being single parents. Overall, nice changes to the article.Victoriali2 (talk) 04:51, 11 April 2018 (UTC)