User talk:Lemnaide68/sandbox

Hello! It looks like you're adding a lot of solid and necessary content to Mary Church Terrell page. I think there are a couple parts that could still use citations or copyedits, but I suspect that might be because you're still working on them or they are copied from the original article. I agree that the activism section benefits from your sub-headings. I wonder if there's a way to revise the sentence, "Much of the discourse within early suffragists movements revolved around the relations between white women and white men, leaving a space which Mary Terrell sought to fill with the voices of black women" that gets at the fact that black women were engaged in discourse about suffrage early on as well, but white suffrage efforts and conversation intentionally excluded them. In other words, emphasizing that black suffragists like MCT made space to advocate for black women's rights. --Raaboyl (talk)

I really appreciate the care you're giving to this page, adding in more information that centers the experiences of Terrell and other women, and engaging in more critical consideration of issues of race, gender, and class. As was noted above, the original lacks citations, includes misinformation, doesn't always follow the expected tone, and often fails to directly address how Terrell's intersecting identities and lived experiences influenced the work she engaged in and how it was received by others. You editing, revising, reorganizing, and expansion of sources helps to make this page much more accurate, robust and meaningful. This is clearly a challenging project you've undertaken, as revising someone else's work is much more difficult than starting from scratch. It's not always easy as I'm reading through this to know where to comment, as I think you're doing so much important re-imagining of the page and adding in changes here and there that some of the comments I might offer are premature or focused on small details while you're still working on broader strokes.

One example of my addressing something unimportant at the moment comes in the mention of Oberlin College - it wasn't the first college in the US to admit African Americans, but it was the first that explicitly welcomed students of all races/ethnicities and sexes at one campus. Even so, I know at the start it didn't allow women to enroll in all courses/majors, but I don't know if it had limitations on the basis of race as well. Betsy ProfBE (talk) 20:20, 26 November 2018 (UTC)