User talk:Lemonlime442/Gwaxdlala/Nalaxdlala (Lull/Hoeya) Marine Refuge/MasterKief420 Peer Review

Positive Feedback Fist and foremost, I would like to highlight the Marine Refuge section of your article as being particularly in depth and descriptive. I really appreciate how you described the process of events that lead to the area becoming an established Marine Refuge in chronological order; by doing this you allowed the reader to further understand the events that took place that allowed the Lull/Hoeya area to transform into a Marine Refuge. Additionally, you also summarized the specific steps taken by the Mamalilikulla First Nation to make the area a Marine Refuge in solid depth. Finally, you cited multiple reputable articles, eliminating any possible bias or misinformation that could result from relying on only one article.

Another point of strength in your article, is your explanation of how the establishment of a Marine Refuge in this area will benefit specific species that experiencing population declines as a result of industry and other anthropogenic activities. Your description of The Mamalilikulla First Nations involvement with the Provincial Government current and future goals for their IPCA was very comprehensive; not only did you list several of their goals, but you also explained the motive behind each of them. On top if this, I also appreciate how you outlined the Provincial Government's involvement in the matter, and how they are working with the Mamalilikulla people to help achieve their objectives for this IPCA.

Engagement I found the articles piece on the Rockfish to be quite informative, prior to this I did not know that they lived to 200 years old and that they usually stay within one habitat for their entire life, as they are particularly vulnerable to change to in pressure. I also did not know that the Convention of Biological Diversity has a goal to protect 30% of land and water by 2030. Finally, I was not aware how important the endemic Red Tree Corral was to the Rockfish.

Content Part 1 The article currently meets the goal of including 5 of the suggested topics.

Content Part 2 In the spirit of providing constructive criticism, I would suggest the article include some additional information on a few more species found in the protected area. On top of this, I would suggest to highlight the specific salmon species that are at risk in the area, instead of just saying that some salmon species are at risk and some are not. I would also suggest to expand on the Coral Fan conversation as well: include what specific fishing activities damage them and highlight the specific species that use these Coral Fans as habitat.

Clarity As a whole the article is clear and easily understood, the only area that was somewhat unclear was the Rockfish section, as some of the in-text citations are incorrectly placed in this section. Just make sure that the in-text citation is placed after your statement is said and not somewhere in the middle, for example, in the sentence "Rockfish[4] are protected by the marine refuge" the citation was placed in the middle of the statement, where it should be placed at the end.

Structure The structure of the article is clear and understandable, the paragraphs flow well and break sections up appropriately. The only thing I would change is combining the first sentence of the "Manalilikulla First Nations History on the Land" sentence with the below paragraph.

Sources The sources are solid as a whole and appropriate according to Wikipedia guidelines, though I would caution against citing news articles (CTV article) and climate activist magazines (The Narwhal), as they can often be somewhat bias in their perspectives. Instead, try to stick to using information from government organizations and peer-reviewed journal articles, like you have for the rest of the article.

Tone The tone of the article is professional and neutral according to Wikipedia guidelines.

Whose Voice is Heard The article failed to mention how the implementation of this IPCA may affect industry in the area, and the local economy in general. I know the area is very sparsely populated, but forestry and fishing are a massive employer on the central coast and I'm sure the implementation of this Lull/Hoeya IPCA has effected these industries to an extent. I could not find any articles to support this theory, so it's probably not reasonable to include anything about this, just providing a bit of food for thought. Aside from this, the article displayed all other relevant perspectives.

Balance Overall the article is well balanced, it addresses most of the critical topics. I would suggest to include a section that briefly summarizes the history of other IPCA's in BC to give the reader some additional context, this is just a suggestion though, I don't necessarily think it's needed. Finally, I reiterate my opinion that some information on a few other species found in the protected area should be included, especially when considering the fact that the species that the article highlighted are the same species that are highlighted in the existing Wikipedia article.