User talk:Levelplayingfield/Timothy P. White

Hi Levelplayingfield. The current draft of this biography is a nice "Start" that could be improved to a "C" on the assessment scale with relatively little additional effort. Here are some observations and suggestions toward that end: I hope these points are helpful. Don't worry, there are less developed articles, like Linda P.B. Katehi (UCD), that have not been "speedily deleted." ~ Ningauble (talk) 18:09, 28 July 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Take a look at the way Marye Anne Fox (UCSD) is formatted with respect to lead & sections. Note in particular how the lead frames the article as about the person rather than the current position, which makes it look less like a press release.
 * 2) "internationally recognized for" needs a citation, or substantiation in the body of the article.
 * 3) Consider covering his career in forward chronological order rather than the reverse.
 * 4) "attended all the branches..." is probably confusing, the general public being aware of numerous campuses, but perhaps not the three umbrella institutions. (This is a nice, colorful point to make in a press release, but may not be encyclopedic.)
 * 5) "Through his leadership, the University of Idaho..." Well, that's what university presidents do. Are there sources indicating what he did in this regard and showing how it was remarkable?
 * 6) Awards and honors could use some citations. This would help to make notability "explicitly demonstrated", rather than just "presumed due to office."
 * 7) Note that the image at commons:File:White at UCR.JPG has been challenged as needing a release or evidence that it is in the public domain.