User talk:Lexidelgizzo/sandbox

Prof. D.'s Feedback
Hi Lexi, Omi's questions and recommendations are good, so do take those into account. Also, though, I'm not clear how this fits into the "genetics" part of the genetics and abortion debate. If this does go into the "legality" section, as a "background" on legality of abortion overall, that could make sense. But we would want a clear transition as to how selective abortion/genetic testing figures into this conversation. There are some errors in the draft so far -- abortions were legal until the mid 19th century, not the other way around (and became legal in the mid/late 20th c). I also wonder about the sources you have so far -- we may need to dig a little deeper to get some more verifiable sources (say, follow the citations from one source, for example, such as this one (https://www.fwhc.org/herstory-repro-rights.htm); and your fourth source link is broken. Let's talk soon about how you see this developing. Thanks! --T. Danylevich (talk) 16:56, 19 April 2020 (UTC) === Feedback on your section:
 * Hey Lexi, which part of your group's Wiki Article were you responsible for? Is your specific contribution for the 'Legality of Selective Abortion' or something else?
 * With the first sentence you say that in the 1800s, abortions were not a crime but were looked down upon, but in the fourth sentence, you say that starting in 1800, states began to pass laws that made abortion illegal. Is there a specific year that states began to pass these laws, and what was the first state to do so? If you're not certain but only know that it started in the 1800, then for your first sentence, I would say something like 'before the 19th century...'
 * I would put a footnote for the second sentence - it might be easier to combine the second and third sentences together and just use a semicolon to separate them
 * I believe you mean the latter half of the 20th century was when abortion was legalized - the sentence that starts with "it was not until the latter half"
 * I would include a hyperlink to the Griswold case so that it will take the readers to the wikipage for the case
 * "In 1973, a case Roe vs. Wade, in Texas pinned down abortion rights in the US." - I think this sentence could be better articulated

Overall feedback: Hey Lexi, I think this is a good first draft! I definitely think you can expand a little more about the unsafe practices that women took to have an abortion as well as the significance of the Roe v. Wade case. I'd also be interested to know how public opinion on abortions has changed since the Roe v. Wade case to today if this at all fits into what you were specifically working on. Hope this help!

Omoyeleokunola (talk) 01:44, 13 April 2020 (UTC)omoyeleokunola