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Article Evaluation
This article clearly discusses the different aspects and history of Peruvian food. After evaluating the article, it seems as though the authors have done a good job since information was properly cited and all information was very relevant to this topic. However, as I delved deeper into reading and evaluating, I found some aspects that they could improve upon. As far as tone goes, there were no biases apparent and all of the information was very factual. With citations, only a few of the many provided had links that actually worked. It seemed as though many of the articles that were used to form this particular article are now outdated. I did not find any other conversations going on in the Talk page. Overall, this article is very factual and has the right intentions, but needs some updating.

Topic Selection
1. Levi Watkins https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Levi_Watkins

This article about Levi Watkins, an African American surgeon, is one that could be modified due to a lack of important information. This meets the topic requirements as Watkins was working toward his career as a surgeon during the civil rights movements in the U.S., so he clearly faced a lot of discrimination before reaching his goal. Under “Article Finder,” this article was labeled with an “S” meaning that there is a lot of room for improvement on this article. An article I found on PubMed, titled “Diversity in the Health Professions Matters: The Untold Story of Meharry Medical College,” contains a lot of information about Watkins that was not included in his Wikipedia article. Source: https://muse.jhu.edu/article/236052/pdf

2. Dorothy Lavinia Brown https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dorothy_Lavinia_Brown

This Wikipedia article describes the life of Dorothy Lavinia Brown, an African American surgeon. This article could be modified due to there not being enough information on the discrimination Dorothy faced, being an African American woman in the field of medicine and specifically surgery. This article was labeled with a “C” meaning that there is also room for improvement here. The article from PubMed, “Diversity in the Health Professions Matters: The Untold Story of Meharry Medical College,” also contains helpful information regarding Dorothy. Source: https://muse.jhu.edu/article/236052/pdf

3. Jennie Smillie Robertson https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jennie_Smillie_Robertson

Jennie Smillie Robertson was the first female surgeon in Canada. This Wikipedia article does not nearly discuss the many struggles she faced in becoming a surgeon as a woman or the many achievements she accomplished. This article also was labeled with a “C,” indicating it has room for improvement. I found an article titled “The history of women in surgery” which contained some information missing from the Wikipedia article. Source: http://canjsurg.ca/wp-content/uploads/2014/03/52-4-317.pdf

Lhoy18 (talk) 21:51, 11 October 2018 (UTC)

Bibliographical Sources for "Women in medicine" article
Pringle, R. (1998). Sex and medicine: gender, power and authority in the medical profession. Cambridge University Press. https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=pYQi2bYGPCcC&oi=fnd&pg=PR6&dq=women+in+medicine+profession&ots=H9V3yxh79-&sig=ZHRG_TOKoAAotCd4S9RlJEVLAqo#v=onepage&q=women%20in%20medicine%20profession&f=false

Talks about the history of women in medicine. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lhoy18 (talk • contribs) 19:33, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Article Copy for editing
Levi Watkins Jr. (June 13, 1944 – April 11, 2015) was an African American heart surgeon and civil rights activist. In 1980, he and Vivien Thomas were the first to successfully implant an automatic defibrillator in a human patient.[1][2]

Contents 1	Early life and education 2	Medical career 3	Death 4	References Early life and education Watkins was born in Parsons, Kansas to Levi Watkins, Sr. (1911–1994)[3][4] and Lillian Varnado (1917–2013).[5] The family moved to Montgomery, Alabama, where his father served as the sixth president of Alabama State College from 1962 to 1983 and his mother worked as a high school teacher. Watkins was the valedictorian of his class at Alabama State Laboratory High School.[6]

He graduated from Tennessee State University and applied to the University of Alabama School of Medicine, but was rejected. Instead, he attended the Vanderbilt University School of Medicine, and became the first African American to obtain a medical degree from that institution. By the time he graduated in 1970, Watkins was still the only black student at the school.[1][2] He was a member of Alpha Omega Alpha, Alpha Phi Alpha, Alpha Kappa Mu, and Beta Kappa Chi.[7][8][9]

Medical career Watkins began his medical residency at Johns Hopkins Hospital in 1971. He left in 1973 for Harvard University where he researched the use of angiotensin blockers in cases of congestive heart failure. Watkins returned to Johns Hopkins two years later, and joined the admissions department in 1979. He was named a professor of cardiac surgery in 1991, and concurrently held the post of Associate Dean of the School of Medicine until his retirement in 2013.[1][2]

Death Watkins died in Baltimore on April 11, 2015, at the age of 70, due to a heart attack and subsequent stroke.[1][2] Vanderbilt University established the Levi Watkins Jr., M.D. Chair in his honor on April 30.[10] He had inaugurated a lecture series also named after him in 2002.[11] A plaque with his picture and description of his life is installed at The Marble Fountain in Patterson Park, in Baltimore.

References Roberts, Sam (April 16, 2015). "Levi Watkins, 70, Dies; Pioneering Heart Surgeon Pushed Civil Rights". New York Times. Retrieved April 24, 2015. McDaniels, Andrea K. (April 21, 2015). "Dr. Levi Watkins Jr. dies at 70; cardiac surgery innovator, activist". Los Angeles Times. Retrieved April 24, 2015. Chandler, D.L. (October 23, 2014). "Little Known Black History Fact: Levi Watkins, Sr". Black America Web. p. 2. Retrieved April 24, 2015. "Alabama State University, A Time Line". Alabama State University. Retrieved April 24, 2015. Poe, Janita (October 7, 2013). "Lillian Watkins, 96: Wife of legendary Alabama State University president Levi Watkins, matriarch of accomplished Watkins family". The Birmingham News. Retrieved April 24, 2015. "Dr. Levi Watkins". The HistoryMakers. February 5, 2007. Retrieved April 24, 2015. Humphrey, Nancy (April 13, 2015). "Vanderbilt mourns loss of Levi Watkins Jr., M.D., pioneer of medicine and champion of racial equality". Vanderbilt University. Retrieved May 7, 2015. Freeman, E. (April 24, 2015). "Colleagues, Friends Reflect on Levi Watkins Legacy". Tennessee State University. Retrieved December 10, 2015. Riley, Wayne J. (2008-05-08). "Diversity in the Health Professions Matters: The Untold Story of Meharry Medical College". Journal of Health Care for the Poor and Underserved. 19 (2): 331–342. doi:10.1353/hpu.0.0009. ISSN 1548-6869. Humphrey, Nancy (April 30, 2015). "Zeppos announces chair in diversity in Dr. Levi Watkins' name". Vanderbilt University. Retrieved May 7, 2015. "Obituary: Dr. Levi Watkins Jr., MD'70, Soldier for Diversity". Vanderbilt Magazine. July 31, 2015. Retrieved September 27, 2015.

Sources and Notes for Article Editing
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-spent life fighting for other African Americans who were struggling in the medical field -“'Throughout his career he was an advocate for all minorities, not just African-Americans', says Duke Cameron, a fellow Professor of Surgery and Chief in the Division of Cardiac Surgery at Johns Hopkins" -grew up in Montgomery -became interested in civil rights movement when he met the Martin Luther King family -graduated with degree in bio from Tennessee State University -1966: Nashville's Vanderbilt University School of Medicine and was only Black student until he graduated in 1970 -at John Hopkin's: first black chief resident of cardiac surgery -began working on defibrillator in 1980 -stayed at Harvard for 3 years studying angiotensin and CHF -then stayed at John's Hopkins for improving defibrillator and open heart surgery techniques -1991: full professor at John's Hopkins, retired 2013 -on admissions board: made the school more "representative of the country" -1978 to 1983, black population at the school increased 5-fold -died of a stroke

Lhoy18 (talk) 23:15, 26 October 2018 (UTC)

Goals by 12/6/2018
By 12/6/2018, I plan to accomplish the following:

-add a section about Levi Watkin's civil rights activism -continue adding information to existing sections (based on research I find) -research and find more articles. there are not too many articles on him but I hope to find some through the library -possibly add another section on what else he has done besides his activism/medical career. maybe something about the research he has done. -add my contributions to the overall summary -make sure that all statements are associated with a reference In order to accomplish these, I will make sure to check my Wikipedia page every 5 days at least, making sure that I complete at least one thing.

Lhoy18 (talk) 21:10, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer review
First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?
 * The sections are sequential/easy to follow
 * The article has throughout research on Watkin's on education and career

What changes would you suggest the author(s) apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
 * I think the article would benefit from photos if you can find some to use of Watkins
 * Beef up the lead section - also add in Vivien Thomas later in the article too? bc she's only mentioned in the lead and not the rest of the article
 * The last section "Death" seems kind of harsh/blunt, maybe consider changing it to "legacy" or something like that
 * I would like to read more about Watkin's Civil Rights activism, like specific/more elaborated examples

What's the most important thing the author(s) could do to improve the article?
 * just try to fill out the sections as much as possible with additional information you find - emphasis on his civil rights activism section and add in any relevant contributions to his medical career section, like maybe his work with Thomas that is mentioned in lead section?
 * pictures

Goldpothos (talk) 22:48, 7 November 2018 (UTC)

Thank you so much for your feedback! I appreciate you pointing out the aspects of the article that look good and also what needs improvement! I was definitely planning on adding photos, so it’s nice to hear that the photos would be helpful! There is not plenty of Vivien Thomas, but once I find more information I will add her to later sections. The civil rights activism section is the section that I am working on most since that's what I can find the most information on, so thank you for letting me know!

Lhoy18 (talk) 02:35, 14 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review: Conor Walsh
It looks like you've added a notable amount of information on this individual, and I believe you're on the right track in this respect. That said, I believe you could add more information in both this individual's Medical Career and Civil Rights Activism to further detail his contributions to society. Though you've already added a reference, I believe that including a few more could help to further round out this individual's notability. I also think that a picture of the individual could help make this article look more official. Though not all articles about individuals need such a section, an addition about Watkins' personal life could render this page as slightly more lifelike, so to speak, as it would give information about the individual aside from that pertaining just to his work.

Conor walsh1 (talk) 23:26, 7 November 2018 (UTC)

Hi, thank you so much for your feedback! I really take it into consideration. I have been working on finding more information about his medical career and civil rights activism, since I know these are important sections. I also have been on the hunt for more references and pictures! I did not even think of making it more "lifelike" so I really appreciate this idea! Thanks again.

Lhoy18 (talk) 02:37, 14 November 2018 (UTC)

Rose's Peer Review
I appreciate you writing about this article, as I have never heard of this surgeon before. I like that you have used an ample amount of sources, and I like that you have incorporated important headings that highlight milestones in Levi's life. I think the article might benefit from the addition of subheadings, which might require expanding the breadth of the article further. This might improve the structure of the article, and make it easier for the readers to located specific information through the table of contents. Adding a list of goals might help with organizing the entire page. The idea itself is great, and I am excited to see how this article develops!

Hi, thank you for your feedback! I appreciate your point of adding subtitles as I had not previously thought of that. I appreciate your feedback and will definitely take it into consideration when editing my article!

Lhoy18 (talk) 02:39, 14 November 2018 (UTC)

11/29 Polish Your Work Assignment
For this assignment, I moved over my work from my Sandbox onto the real Wikipedia page for Levi Watkins. I had new information for each section and added 2 new references. No one has commented on my work yet, so I have not had anyone to respond to thus far.

Lhoy18 (talk) 19:35, 29 November 2018 (UTC)