User talk:Lhymel9/sandbox

Hà Nội Highway

·This article's statements could be rewritten to form complete sentences. Currently, most of the statements are simply lists of facts.

·The article has a source cited; however, it is not in the proper format and it has not used the official Wikipedia method for citing sources.

·The information in this article is unorganized. Some of the information isn't directly related to the subject itself and should be placed in a sub-section.

Lhymel9 (talk) 00:48, 6 February 2015 (UTC)


 * Approved. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:47, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

Military history of Haiti

This article requires additional citations.

Lhymel9 (talk) 03:36, 9 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Approved. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:17, 10 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Your sources are good, and you integrated them well into the article. I did notice there's a colon missing in the book title (after "Taking Haiti"). Don't worry about the sandbox, but do fix it in the article. The last thing is to leave a comment on the article talk page. Once you do that, you'll be finished with this assignment. Josef Horáček (talk) 23:40, 16 February 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 3: Homework 1
Sandinista ideology

This article's lead section needs work.

Lhymel9 (talk) 19:44, 19 February 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 3: Homework 2
Aside from a lack of a title, the article fails to demonstrate what the main topic is through its structure. Even in the history section, the article makes many assumptions about the reader's knowledge of the political history of Nicaragua. In not allocating a correct portion of information to the history section, the subtopics in the theory section have little relevance to the history section. The subtopics under the theory section seem unfocused or randomly selected; however, this potentially could be fixed by placing all of the subtopics under one heading.

Lhymel9 (talk) 03:36, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Not an easy article to work on, but your lead looks very promising. Add a bit more about the basic tenets of the ideology. What was the Sandinista vision of society? Also proofread: in the first sentence, replace "the series" with "a series"; later on, remove the apostrophe from "its." Josef Horáček (talk) 05:18, 1 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Excellent work. Josef Horáček (talk) 12:47, 10 March 2015 (UTC)