User talk:Liambuirs/sandbox

Hey Liam! I have completed the peer-review for your article and just wanted to let you know that I think it's off to a really strong start. It is well-organized, well-written, and supported by peer-reviewed literature. My two big requests would be that you find some more references and edit your current references to include easily-accessed links. Best of luck! Annawesthaver4340 (talk) 15:37, 4 March 2020 (UTC)

Hi Anna, thank you for the feedback, it's been quite helpful! Good catch on the lack of reference links. I hope to add more sources for the draft and expand further on the topic in the coming weeks. Liambuirs (talk) 03:51, 7 March 2020 (UTC) Liam

Hi Liam,

I have some feedback for you! Good work so far.

1. Your sentence "However, some natural enemies can tolerate this; Encarsia formosa, a whitefly parasitoid is one such case. While it too is slowed by plant hairs, the slower navigation results in higher detection of juvenile whiteflies." could be revised. I suggest " However, this is not the case for all natural enemies. For example, E. formosa, a whitefly parasitiod is slowed by plant hairs, which allows them to detect a higher and predate on a higher number of juvenile whiteflies.

2. delete "crop areas" from the sentence the following sentence "This could cause natural enemies to enter crops or crop areas that are occupied by pest populations that would otherwise likely remain undetected by the natural enemies.[2]" It is redundant.

3. Change "was" in this sentence to "has been" "This was illustrated through monitoring aphid populations in an experimental sugar beet crop; USE A PERIOD HERE. When only beets were grown, the parasitism level of the aphid population was low IN COMPARISON TO WHAT?.

4. There are many references for the cotton extra floral nectaries work you describe. It looks like you are heavily relying on reference #2. Refer to the lecture where we talked about this. I believe there are a couple more references for this work there.

5. I think a big part of the tri-trophic interactions you still need to consider are the pathogens. There is a large body of research on host plants effecting the efficacy of baculoviruses, bt, etc. The efficacy of these agents can be altered up to 50 fold! I will email you a review article on this and the work by Janmaat and Myers discusses this in the context of Bt and cabbage loopers on different host plants.

6. Also there is a lot of interesting work on the impact of soils on these relationships. I will email you the specifics of some paper presentations from the entomology societies joint Vancouver meeting in 2018 if you are interested.

Great work so far. Keep working on it!

Take care,

Michelle

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