User talk:Librarybookers/Tracy Mattes

Some issues and questions
Have you looked at the article on somebody like Jackie Joyner-Kersee for some hints? Note that the latter, for example, doesn't tell us her height or weight. I repeat: read WP:NPOV and WP:PEACOCK for the kinds of language to avoid. "Starting as an unknown athlete" for example; "award-winning business plan" for another. Nobody cares that the valedictorian of a university class in a tiny country received their diploma from the local head of state! "Tracy’s work with sport and humanitarian causes has taken her to more than 70 countries around the world": that goes in a brochure or magazine profile, not in a reference work. You're not being anywhere near merciless enough. Look at how much leaner the article is on Jackie J-K, compared to this draft. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  22:45, 26 October 2008 (UTC)

Improvements
I see these same mistakes alot on the new Wiki pages. I tried to take out some of the things that sound exciting but are not relevent here. I've added some references and sources and changed some of the writing. I hope others will help improve this page —Preceding unsigned comment added by 63.164.145.85 (talk) 21:31, 7 November 2008 (UTC)

Phrases
I've also deleted some of the phrases mentioned by orange mike above. I also removed the part of competing on a relay with Jackie Joyner Kersee. Thats impressive, but not relevant

Thanks & Links Problem
Thanks for the help. I really appreciate it. I have looked at the Jackie Joyner Kersee page for reference, and see what you mean about writing a biography keeping it lean. (If I wrote JJK's bio, it would be 5 pages long and probably sound like advertising too.)I've tried to send an email to her website requesting links acutally, but I am not sure who it goes to, maybe Monaco, or if she even will receive it, so I really appreciate the effort in finding the links of refrences and sources that were added here. However, I think that the links are not embedded properly, so I copied the external links and added it there by the numbers. That seemed to work. I really appreciate all of your help here. (Librarybookers (talk) 03:20, 8 November 2008 (UTC))

Salut!
I add one reference to story. Story Name is - President Fosbury "The power of sport and the role of Olympians are critical for development and peace" —Preceding unsigned comment added by 81.253.25.209 (talk) 11:46, 17 November 2008 (UTC)

Links Fixed
I see many References and third party links cited in this article, the problem I see was the links were not entered correctly and not to be seen when you click there. I changed format so you can now click and see the news and reference links that establish notable and references.

Go ASU
Sun Devil Track Star —Preceding unsigned comment added by 72.208.85.32 (talk) 22:12, 15 December 2008 (UTC)

Humanitarian Link
To help out, I added a humanitarian link that demonstrates Tracy's humanitarian work with the UN and Olympic side. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.33.61.158 (talk) 14:31, 2 May 2009 (UTC)

Link to Actual Page
Hello everyone. Since there seems to be alot of interest in Tracy, I've provided a link to the actual Tracy Mattes Wikipedia page. I thought those fans here trying to create a sandbox page would like to know. I've left your references but removed the rest and provided the direct link. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Forest1Dan (talk • contribs) 23:42, 23 April 2010 (UTC)