User talk:Lilolov3r/sandbox

Maddie's peer review

 * The article has clear headings underneath the section, which makes the content easy to divide and decipher. I really enjoyed the clear connection that you make between Aslan and Jesus. The details are well synthesized, which makes it clear that there are both similarities and differences between the two.
 * I would suggest reading through your article again, and making note of some grammatical errors. There are some places that a semicolon/colon would benefit, and there are some commas missing. These changes would be an improvement because the errors are a little distracting as they currently stand, and I know these quick changes would truly boost the content that you have. I would also suggest looking for another source other than Chapman for the "Cold War" section. Using one source for a large section like that makes the content seem a little unbalanced, and adding another source would allow the information to be balanced.
 * The most important thing to improve the article would be to review the "planets" section. I think this is important information, but I am not sure that "planets" are a theme throughout the novel. I think you have plenty of information concerning "religion" and the "Cold War," and "planets" may not be as necessary as the other sections.
 * I really like how you have your information organized and everything looks neat under the headings. I think your organization would be applicable to our article, as our content is currently a little jumbled in my opinion. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mmeyer7 (talk • contribs) 18:17, 30 April 2018 (UTC)

Svasia's Peer Review

 * The article's sections are very informative. The links to other wiki articles seemed to be well placed to help navigate the topic.
 * I would suggest some clarity on specific aspects of the article along with fixing a few grammar mistakes. The part about the president of the U.S. in the cold war section, I was wondering if this was ab out all presidents or just the one who was in office at the time of the novel being written.
 * Most important thing to improve article is probably the grammar mistakes because the sections seem really good so far. The article could be improved a bit further by adding the wiki links to the things about Jesus. Svasia (talk) 19:15, 30 April 2018 (UTC)