User talk:LilyDuong/sandbox

Friendly comments/peer review:

I see you are still in the early stages of placing your research in the Sandbox, so I'll comment now and also come back to edit again once you are done! Just Ping me when you're ready!!

Change this sentence from "One of the main causes of mangrove loss is the expansion of shrimp production and coastal regions of Southeast Asia have become dominant producers over the past 50 years" TO "One of the main causes of mangrove loss is THAT the expansion of shrimp production and coastal regions of Southeast Asia have become dominant producers over the past 50 years." Or anything else along those lines to remedy the flow.

This is a very long sentence: "The performance of shrimp ponds is dependent on mangrove ecosystem goods and services but mangrove forests are cleared to construct these shrimp farms, thus integrated mangrove-shrimp farming is an alternative practice to sustain the livelihoods of coastal communities, the production of timber as well as the protection of the mangrove forests." --> Maybe cut the sentence at "thus" with a period?

General comments Possible hyperlinks: shrimp farming, mangrove forest Is there going to be another section besides history? Karoap (talk) 23:51, 2 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Hey! Thank you very much for your comments! I added more content but I haven't completely finished the last two sections. I was thinking of adding a short sentence to each point to explain a little further. LilyDuong (talk) 16:37, 3 April 2019 (UTC)