User talk:Lilyzzf/sandbox article three

Fangzhu's Peer Review
Hi Lily,

I am very glad to read over your editing article of Eight-legged essays. After comparing the original article and your revised version, I think you did a good job to add some new information, reconstruct some sentences and delete some redundant words. You pay much attention to the details and that's impressive.

In terms of the structure, I think it would be better to divide “history” and "viewpoints" sections into minor ones. For example, the "history" section can include the development of eight-legged essays during "Song dynasty", "Yuan dynasty","Ming dynasty" and "Qing dynasty"since there were some typical cases related with eight-legged essays in these periods. Also, the "viewpoints" section can be split into "positive viewpoints" and "negative viewpoints" as there was much debate among ancient Chinese intellectuals, which you can do more research on this.

''Lily's update: Good point! I divided the sections.''

In terms of the content, you've already added some important details which are not mentioned in the original article, such as eight sections. I think it would be better to add some information about the features of eight-legged essays，such as its titles, content, words limits, etc. The original article does mention the content, structure and word limits, but I think the content it covered is very limited. Therefore, it would be better to do more research and add more new information regarding these aspects. I've seen you added another two new sections which are "cognitive issues" and "printing and publishing". Even though you have not added information under these two, I think it's a good start and look forward to reading these new contents later.

Lily's update: This is part of my plan going forward, so I will do more research and add more things later.

In terms of the tone, I think you did a good job and everything is neutral. In terms of the source, the original article has 12 citations and yours (including the original citations) has reached 17. Thus I encourage you to do more research and add more appropriate citations related to eight-legged essay so as to find more content gap.

''Lily's update: This is part of my plan going forward, so I will do more research and add more citations later. However, I want to note that even though the number of citations didn't increase by too many, I fixed some problematic citations that were in the original article by doing some research and replaced them too. So perhaps I added something like 7 new sources so far. But yes, I will add more citations later.''

In sum, you did a good job! Keep working on it!FangzhuLu (talk) 04:06, 16 November 2018 (UTC)

''Thank you, Fangzhu, for your peer review! These are all helpful suggestions.'' Lilyzzf (talk) 04:23, 18 November 2018 (UTC) Lily