User talk:LindseyRenk

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Hello, LindseyRenk, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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LindseyRenk (talk) 04:08, 23 January 2016 (UTC)

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Hi, LindseyRenk -- welcome to Wikipedia! As Ian mentioned, the Teahouse is a great resource for new editors. But did you know that Wikipedia also has an extensive help library for common questions? Of course, if you run into a question or problem, you're always welcome to get in touch with me either by email or on my talk page. Happy editing! Fraudoktorkatie (talk) 14:32, 27 January 2016 (UTC)

Your edit to Abduction
I reverted your edit to Abduction. That is a disambiguation page, it is not meant to contain any substantive content or references. SJK (talk) 09:07, 26 February 2016 (UTC)

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Hello, LindseyRenk, and welcome to Wikipedia! Thank you for your contributions.

I notice that one of the first articles you created was Sports Injury Article, which appears to be an article about yourself. This is a common mistake made by new Wikipedians—as this is an encyclopedia, we wouldn't expect to have an article about every contributor. Your user page, however, is a great place to write about yourself, making sure to stay within user page guidelines. Just click your user name at the top of the screen when you are logged in, and edit it normally.

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Peer Review for Sports Injury Article Draft
The article does a good job of staying neutral in terms of presenting information and terminology used throughout. I liked the inclusion of real-life examples to enhance the explanation of a specific thing being discussed. The examples used helped to tie together multiple ideas in the form of a possible, literal situation. Also, taking advantage of linking other Wikipedia articles throughout the article was very well done. The linking to numerous articles was done well because it doesn’t just provide links to random, minor terms within the article, but major topics that have a large “definition”, background, or understanding.

One change I suggest making to the article is to include a section covering some of the most common sports injuries acquired. Within this section, you could also include sports or activities it is common to acquire those injuries. Making that change would be an improvement to the article because your article discusses methods of prevention, so I feel giving information on which activities could increase some of the injuries you mention as examples can provide more support to how and why the different aspects of prevention are used. I also feel including that section would be beneficial because in the lead section, you list different things related to injury and the leading cause of injury; however, you don’t expand much on those things later in the article. Another possible change would be to include actual statistics to help support statements. For instance, in the lead section you state that the leading cause of death involving sports injuries is brain injuries. I feel like including the statistic of how much of documented sports injury related death are from brain injuries. In addition, you could include statistics as a way to compare the most common sports injuries.

I feel the use of examples may be a possible way to enhance my own article to tie together activities it discusses about being a diener (autopsy assistant).

Djack21 (talk) 03:33, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

Response
Thank you for your suggestions in ways to improve my article! I find your feedback very useful and beneficial in editing my final draft.

LindseyRenk (talk) 20:12, 10 April 2016 (UTC)

Peer Edit
Hi Lindsey!

I really liked reading your rough draft and plans for the sports injury page! I think that you have done an excellent job focusing on one or two subtopics for this article to really make your contribution have a big impact. Your article looks very well researched and I think that your citations are appropriate throughout your portion of the article. The tone is excellent as well, neutral and well-explained. A small edit that I suggest is to say that injuries can also result from poor form or technique. I know that your content says poor training in practice, but that seems a little vague, and more detail can only help! I liked that you linked several other articles, but perhaps numbness and tingling don't have to be linked overtime they are mentioned, especially because they are all mentioned within 10 sentences of each other. "Sport(s) injury" does not need to be capitalized throughout the article. Sectioning off the article or making paragraphs may make it easier to read. I agree that adding statistics could be beneficial. If you could find research on it, it would be interesting to see how often numbness or tingling indicates a serious injury(one that make take months to recover from) vs. a relatively less serious injury(days or weeks to recover). Overall, I think you have done a great job so far, and I'm looking forward to reading your final article! Good luck!

Kosaskih (talk) 03:36, 10 April 2016 (UTC)

Response
Thank you for your feedback! I find your grammar and punctuation edits to be very beneficial for improving my final draft.