User talk:Lindseyfrankel/sandbox

We're getting there, but not quite there yet. The first reference in your bibliography is actually Starr, F. (1904). Notes upon the ethnography of southern Mexico. Proceedings of the Davenport Academy of Sciences 9, 63-172, Davenport, Iowa: Putnam Memorial Publication Fund. and the one that you have under "Museum" is actually Mendez, S. (1921). The Maya Indians of Yucatan in 1861. Indian Notes and Monographs 9(3), 143-201. New York: Museum of the American Indian Chuck Haberl (talk) 17:16, 24 March 2018 (UTC)

The lead is insightful and interesting. However, I suggest rephrasing the facts to be more orderly, or chronological, in a sense. I would suggest rephrasing it as, "Xtabay is a female demon originating from a Mayan legend who has ill intentions towards men. She dwells in the forest to lure men to their deaths and, according to those that have escaped her, she possesses incomparable beauty and evil. She has beautiful black shiny hair that falls down to her ankles and resides in the Yucatan Peninsula. The legend of Xtabay explains her story." Kr514 (talk) 18:51, 6 April 2018 (UTC)