User talk:LisaA1X

Here is my "official" peer review from class: Peer review

This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)

LisaA1X

Link to draft you're reviewing:

User:LisaA1X/sandbox

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

Most of this information would not update the lead, but I think you should include the information about her dismissal from SNH48, both in the article and in the lead section as well.

Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?

Yes, the lead looks pretty good. Again, just include the information about her leaving SNH48.

Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?

No

Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?

No

Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Concise and clear.

Lead evaluation: Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?

All the content added is relevant to this idol.

Is the content added up-to-date?

All the content is up to date.

Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Again, I think you should include details about her dismissal from the group SNH48, as well as any career she may have had since.

Content evaluation Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?

Yes, The content is neutral, stating only facts.

Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

No, I didn't find any bias.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

No, I think the viewpoints presented were just statement of fact, no over representation, but I do think more information about her leaving the group and her career after SNH48 would be helpful.

Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

No, The content was written with the intention to persuade, only inform the reader.

Tone and balance evaluation Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

Most of the content has good citations, there are a few areas that need further work. I don't think that you can cite the SNH48 official website, because it is not independent or neutral.

Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?

From what I could tell, the sources seem to accurate (they are in Chinese, so I could only read it in google translate).

Are the sources current?

From what I could tell, the sources seem to up to date (they are in Chinese, so I could only read it in google translate).

Check a few links. Do they work?

all the links worked, but this one: https://www.sohu.com/a/230687793_115487only brought up some pictures. Did you mean to cite a news article instead?

Sources and references evaluation Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

There were some great details. I wrote in LisaA1X talk space some ideas for how to re-word some of the sentences, to help them flow more naturally.

Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

The grammar and spelling were quite good over-all.

Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

It will be easier to understand the organization once it is mixed in with the main article already written in Wikipedia. However, the sandbox draft I read was organized in a clear chronological order.

Organization evaluation Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?

Does Not Apply

Are images well-captioned?

Does Not Apply

Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?

Does Not Apply

Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Does Not Apply

Images and media evaluation Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?

Yes, this article is stronger, and more complete because of LisaA1X's efforts.

What are the strengths of the content added?

The specific videos Huang Tingting was a part of, her first center performance, and the information about servers crashing because of so many people voting at once were especially interesting to me. She sounds like a talented woman.

How can the content added be improved?

As I noted above, including information about her dismissal from the group, and her career after would be helpful. Also, finding sources to cite that are not from the SNH48 website would be good, since they are site devoted to this group, the information may not be unbiased. Also, consider some of the re-wording/edits I sent to your talk page.

Overall evaluation

I think that you are off to a great start. Great job, and keep up the good work! Clerie (talk) 23:10, 6 March 2020 (UTC)

here are some suggestions for how you may want to re-word your sandbox. I may have mis-understood some of your writing, so feel free to alter this as much as necessary. Thanks again for your help with my peer review.

2013 On December 6, Huang accepted the “Most Potential Combination” award on behalf of SNH48 group at the 6th Top Chinese Music Chart Breakthrough New Artist Awards. (need a citation) Huang and other SNH48 members performed the debut single "Heavy Rotation " and the title track of the album "Fortune Cookie of Love " to open the awards ceremony.[1] On December 31, Huang participated in Dragon TV's “New Year’s Eve concert” themed "Dream of Oriental Life". The dancing movements were representative of the group making a “fireball”, to signify passing love to everyone.[2]

2014 On January 18, Huang participated in the first anniversary concert, a “Red and White PK Concert” for SNH48 in Shanghai. Huang was in Team NII, and the major PK competition was between Team SII and Team NII. The winner was determined by fan votes. [3] On March 30, Huang represented SNH48 to accept the ERC Chinese Top Ten Best New Artist Award. [4] On July 4, she participated in the original season of the variety show "SNHello Xingmeng Academy" which was planned and launched by SNH48. It was the first Chinese variety show exclusively for idol groups[5]. On July 26, she participated the first General Election of SNH48, placing in the top 16. [6] 2016 On February 27, Huang received more than 460,000 votes on live show of "National Pretty Girl". (need citation) During the voting period, several servers were paralyzed due to so many voters trying to vote at the same time. (need citation) This still holds the record for the highest votes in this live show's history. [7] On March 18, her music video "Night Butterfly" debuted. Huang was allowed to film this music video as her reward for General Music Election BEST30. [8] This music video was filmed in South Korea. On April 1, Huang got her first center in the music video “Engine of Youth;” this is also the SNH48's first original single.[9] On May 3, Huang’s first solo music video, "Youth Flash" was officially released.[10] On May 20, “Dream Land” was released. It is a group extended play recod (EP) which was filmed in Mauritius, Africa and combines many African musical elements.[11] That combines a lots of (need a complete thought)[12] 2017 On February 26, Huang was a guest on the talk show Roast! She served as the “Talk King” or host for the episode. On June 9, Huang played a role in drama “Stairway to Stardom”. Huang's character is a popular actress named Chen Yurou. [13] On June 26, she starred as a small princess in an ancient fantasy network drama called "Cover The Sky". [14]

2018 On May 4, Huang performed the song “The Best Stage” to express the concept of creation and dreaming the future.[15]

I think you should include some information about her being dismissed from the group on December 20, 2019 Variety Shows Year	English Title	Chinese Title	Cast Role	Notes 12/15/2013	China's Got Talent	中国达人秀	Guest 09/10/2016	Happy Camp	快乐大本营	Guest 02/26/2017	Roast! 吐槽大会	Talk King 6/10/2018	Day Day Up	天天向上	Guest 6/24/2019	Lin Jia Shi Hua	邻家诗话	Guest	talk about the Chinese culture of poetry, song, music, dance, book, painting, tea Clerie (talk) 22:27, 6 March 2020 (UTC)

testClerie (talk) 15:38, 6 March 2020 (UTC)

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