User talk:Lissy04

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Hello, Lissy04, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Feedback
What article do you plan to add this to? Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:10, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

Thanks. Some feedback on your draft
 * Please use the cite tool on the visual editor for your references. Right now, you are using harv templates, but they aren't properly formatted, and don't work. The dog food article, on the other hand, uses the standard reference formatting; since articles shouldn't use a mixture of two styles, you need to switch to the standard form.
 * References should appear immediately after the statements they support. There should be a minimum of one reference per paragraph, and there shouldn’t be any text after the last reference in a paragraph. As it currently stands, you have a lot of unsourced content.
 * Only capitalise proper nouns, don't capitalise words like "urea"
 * Don't include background material. For example, this is purely background material. If the reader really don't know what protein is, they can click the link and learn more at the protein article.

This belongs in the article, but not in the specific section about low-protein diets.

This part is probably a good starting point for your section

However, neither of these are sourced. These must have supporting citations.


 * Wikipedia articles don't give advice. That's one of the firm rules of Wikipedia. The bolded portion is advice.
 * The part I italicised is also problematic, since it's really presented as advice as well. You can attribute this opinion to a source, but you can't state it as a fact in Wikipedia's voice.
 * I'm skeptical that you can generalise about "over-the-counter" diets that broadly. Are you really confident that this is true everywhere in the world? If you aren't, don't say something so general. Your readers may well not be in a country that has any sort of standards for dog food.

If you're writing about low protein diets, don't create a section about high protein diets. You can contrast low protein diets with high protein diets, but you shouldn't create a section about high-protein diets. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:28, 27 November 2017 (UTC)