User talk:Literature8/sandbox

You could probably split this into a few paragraphs for readability and clarity. Like at “An Arawak/Taino home…” starts a new paragraph about society, so you could have a topic sentence leading to your discussion of indigenous life. Separate small paragraph for agriculture/food. From “The Arawak/Taino people travelled…” to the end, that could be its own paragraph. I would rearrange the sentence order here because it doesn’t seem totally logical; just be conscious of it. In general, you could probably combine short sentences more frequently and be more economical with wording. While it seems like you’re doing this to maximize the amount of content and source everything you say exactly, you could sometimes put citations in the middle of sentences at certain words. SBaylor (talk) 18:10, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review for Will M. by Maria Jensen
I would split up the paragraph into four or five smaller paragraphs. Maybe have an introduction followed by separate paragraphs about the housing, food, and interactions with others. Great job with adding citations, but some of the related sentences can be combined to help the section flow better. In addition, I am not sure if the word "Supposedly" is one of the words that Wikipedia does not like, so I would start that sentence off with a signal phrase. Overall, great job with adding clear, informative, and relevant content to the article! Mjensen32 (talk) 18:19, 27 November 2018 (UTC)