User talk:Livelygoose/Haft Peykar/Curious Shrimp Peer Review

This article is really clear and easy to follow, and it provides a strong cultural context for the Haft Peykar. Structurally, it flows nicely, and I think each section adds relevant information to the description of this poem, although a few could potentially be developed even further. Specifically, the "Story" section could have more detailed information on the contents of each tale, although the table provides a very nice visual for quickly unpacking the poem's contents. I do, however, think it would be helpful to briefly summarize each chapter so anyone who is interested can understand the deeper themes that occur in this poem. Also, structurally, the second sentence in this section is a little bit confusing, and it might help to break it up a little bit.

Additionally, "Cultural influence" is a really interesting section that provides useful insight into the broad reach of this poem, but it might benefit from in-text citations. Although there are a number of links in this section, it is unclear where the provided information was ultimately sourced from. This issue seems to be present in multiple places (i.e. the introduction and "Story" sections), but there are a number of sources listed in the references so hopefully it should not be hard to create in-text citations that clearly connect to them. Also, a few links in the larger article are red and do not lead to another page. I am not entirely sure how to fix this, but the issue might just be that the content was deleted or incorrectly linked.

Overall, the writing in this article is really strong, and the subject and general outline of the poem is well-communicated. The only thing that I am really missing are some citations and maybe some additional details on the poem's specifics.Curious Shrimp (talk) 19:20, 9 March 2024 (UTC)