User talk:Liz.go/sandbox

Peer review
Hi Liz! Here are my comments. I don't have many since I think your edits are really well done! The tone is encyclopedic (so much so that I can't tell which parts are copied over and which you wrote yourself unless you've noted it). I think you have a good range of topics you're looking at here, and I think it'll be good to look into the specific differences in legal definitions. I don't know how you could expand too much on the legal definitions beyond what already exists since I myself am not well versed on that. Perhaps you can expand on the bit about the distinction between an asylee and a refugee and how that difference has evolved over time? I would also recommend expanding the Programs for children bit. Perhaps you can expand it to programs to support youth AND families in order to include a broader demographic and clarify age ranges (ex: older children and education efforts vs youth and childcare for families)

For this section: Intro In 2016, the IRC resettled 84,995 refugees from several countries worldwide[7] (added)

The IRC also has an innovation center, called "Airbel", which conducts research on communities affected by crisis.

The IRC in the United States uses the definition of "refugee" that originated from the 1951 United Nations Convention Relating to the Status of Refugees and its associated 1967 Protocol: “A refugee is defined as a person outside of his or her country of nationality who is unable or unwilling to return because of persecution or a well-founded fear of persecution on account of race, religion, nationality, membership in a particular social group, or political opinion”.[8]

"Consisting of first responders, humanitarian relief workers, international development experts, health care providers, and educators, the IRC has assisted millions of people around the world since its founding in 1933" (may remove because of tone)

I agree that the last quote ought to be removed. It doesn't seem necessary and if it's from the IRC website might introduce bias. If you want to keep it, I would make sure to integrate it in a way that clarifies that it's a self-reported claim/quote (if it is from an IRC website). As for the structure, I think "The IRC in the UNited States uses the definition..." might work well as a lead for this section. I don't know if by "Intro" you meant that you wanted to edit the lead section or if you meant for this to be a lead within "Operations", but either way it could work. I think you could expand on the different kinds of research that Airbel does and in what sectors they conduct research, what kind of research (i.e. RCTs, surveys, etc?) And I don't have any copyedits for you because the grammar for what you have written is clear.

Some briefer notes:

- for the quote: "Since there exists no universally accepted definition for the term "refugee", many dispute the academic respectability of the policy-based definition, outlined in the 1951 Convention Relating to the Status of Refugees, most often used. " This last clause starting with "outlined in..." is awkward and there either should be a comma before it or it can be split into two proper sentences.

- i like your idea of switching the sections between definition and sources of refugee law

- my understanding is that the IRC has 5 major goals that they try and include in their work. Perhaps you can list these under "Advocacy" and discuss them further OR reorganize "Operations" under those 5 umbrellas that the IRC offers on the website to organize it in a more cohesive way.

Butnotsowithus (talk) 01:39, 20 March 2018 (UTC)