User talk:Lizzisansc/sandbox

Group 24 Doing the Review
Review #1

ChemBox looks great, probably didn't need that second photo, but points are points ;)

"Alpha-olefins are distinguished by having a double bond at the primary or alpha (α) position." was a bit redundant. "This location of a double bond enhances the reactivity of the compound and makes it useful for a number of applications." expand on this maybe (how does it enhance the reactivity?), if not in this portion of the page, then try to point the reader to the "Reactivity and Reactions" section for more info on this.

"modified Ziegler ethylene chain growth technology" maybe add an embedded link so that people can jump to its page

All in All it looks great, love the citations throughout

Rob

Rob Madsen (talk) 04:55, 30 October 2012 (UTC)

Review #2

I think your ChemBox looks very well done. It is very good that you got a lot of the information filled out in it. I think that the second picture is good to show just so that if people who are just learning chemistry look at it, it is more easily understood in that form. For the molecular formula, the subscripts did not get transferred, just to let you know.

Maybe in your reactions and reactivity section, you could put some examples of reactions that are seen with this molecule. I think that would be beneficial so people can look at patterns of reactions and see how the molecule reacts with different things.

"Mercaptans" is a term that I am unaware of, so maybe put in a link for the definition or explain what it is so the molecule can be better understood.

I think overall, more links to unknown terms would be helpful to viewers, but other than that, this looks great!

Stefanie

Ronge2 (talk) 08:17, 1 November 2012 (UTC)

This article is inferior and is not ready to be uploaded
This article, like most from this class, reads poorly and requires major help from a professional chemist. Ask your teacher to contact the Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Chemicals. Please do not upload this article until it meets our minimal standards--Smokefoot (talk) 02:58, 22 November 2012 (UTC)