User talk:Lmhennessey

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Hello, Lmhennessey, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Feedback
Nice work on your article draft. The only real problem I see is that you used external links in the body of the article. Please convert these to properly-formatted inline references. External links usually don't include enough information about the page being linked to, and since pages are often renamed the links can be lost. (If you reply to this message here, please include  in your response, to ensure that I see your reply.) Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:08, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Feedback on Mentorship
Hi! I'm the content expert for your class and your professor asked me to give you some feedback on your content.

Offhand everything looks great - I tweaked the headings a little bit, but the only thing I need you to work on is the following content that was in the Common Themes and Effective Strategies section:


 * Aguilar structures her book to be read during coaching and each chapter has a “read this when:” bullet point list to guide you through different chapters and topics when they are pertinent to your work as an instructional coach. The section “Which Beliefs Help a Coach Be More Effective” focuses more on the individual coach’s beliefs opposed to the act of coaching and the effective ways to make coaching work in a school. Aguilar uses the ladder of inference to allow oneself to evaluate their own thoughts, and ultimately use this ladder to help principals and teachers evaluate their own beliefs before jumping to assumptions. Aguilar states that her “list of beliefs has changed over the years. You can change yours, too.  The point is to be mindful of the beliefs from which we’re working and to notice the effect of working from those beliefs.” Beliefs can change about approaches to teaching, classroom management, or even content knowledge.

I removed this from the article for the time being because it only focuses on strategies from one book and in a way kind of comes across like a review of her work. Can you re-write this to be more general and add an additional source that also gives themes and strategies? I would also recommend renaming it "Themes and strategies" because that way it would also be more general. I generally try to avoid using the terms "common" and "effective", mostly because those terms are kind of relative - what is common and effective for one may not be for someone else, especially in other countries and cultures.

Again, that's the only thing that stood out and otherwise your work was very good. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 06:29, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Hi! I'm giving you some follow up feedback. Something I forgot to mention last time is that when a person is mentioned for the first time in an article you should give their full name. Other than that, good editing with the change to the section I mentioned. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 05:12, 10 May 2017 (UTC)