User talk:Lnguy166

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Peer Review
This is an overall well thought-out article. The use and amount of sources is fantastic, as well as the see also mentions. There might be too many assumed feelings of Tyra such as "she wants" or it made her the most happy. You are talking about her in a neutral sense, so you may want to omit these moments or add less emotional or personal language. On a similar note, there is some language throughout that suggests a favor of this type of art, be more objective overall about the art pieces. The lead of your article gives a great idea of the topics of it, and fleshes out perfectly the outline of what will be read in the forthcoming article. Within the education area specifically, I would discuss the degrees but not the fact that they weren't used. Every degree is usable even if it's in a field that it not similar to the career path one takes. My only other criticism would be of the syntax and grammar in some places. There are a few run-on sentences and some odd wording that can simply be proof-read and fixed. This is an overall great article that only needs a few diction and grammar rephrasing and possibly the addition of some more traditional sources besides the internet. 2600:1702:31:41F0:7DBD:DBB9:96E6:B3F1 (talk) 18:26, 25 February 2020 (UTC)