User talk:Lnmorton/sandbox

By the time this article is finished, I want to have expanded this article 5-fold and really highlight the incredible accomplishments of Lila Wallis. It is terribly unfortunate that the article began as a mere few paragraphs. This woman also known as the "godmother of women's health" deserves to have her story told and her achievements recognized, and that is exactly what I hope to do by the completion of this Wikipedia project. Lnmorton (talk) 00:32, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

Lnmorton's Peer Review
1. The article did a great job a changing the wording of the lead section so that it is more clear and easy to understand. The Training section was changed to Education and Training to encompass more related information. The Education and Training section was expanded upon in which the existing sentences were modified to describe the subject in a clear way and more information was added to the section to make the section easier to understand. I was most impressed with the large structural modifications in the article. An Accomplishments section, Personal Life section, and Awards Sections were all added to the article to provide a clear structure for the article. The Accomplishments section, Personal Life section, Awards Sections and Notes section were all expanded upon which provided key information through neutral content that aids in gaining a better understanding of the topic. The sources used were reliable which gives more credibility to the article.

2. The author has made a lot of changes already and is working towards the goal of expanding the article five-fold; however, the only changes I might suggest would to be to add some images or add a few more hyperlinks. Adding images would provide the reader with a visual representation which makes the article easier to understand. The hyperlinks would help in understanding terms that may not be familiar to the reader.

3. The most important thing the author could do to improve the article would be to continue to expand each section by adding neutral content to aid in creating an article that describes the subject in a clear and easy to understand way. The original article did not contain much detailed information that contributes to the understanding of the subject so I think that expansion will allow this article to be more useful.

4. I think I could apply adding more sections to the article I am working on. I was planning on only expanding the sections that were present initially; however, adding sections is a good way to organize and create a clearer structure for my article which will aide in making it easier to understand.

Kaosuna (talk) 20:12, 7 November 2018 (UTC)

Response to Peer Review:

Thank you for such positive words about my work on the article, I have put a lot of time into expanding the article and it feels great knowing that my work is noticeable. As I mentioned in the other peer review, I have been searching for a photo and located one through the American Medical Women's Association website. I am waiting to hear back from the executive director on whether not I am granted permission to use the picture. I agree that incorporating a picture would be a great addition to the Wikipedia page and is vital to a successful page. I tried to hyperlink as many words as I could, but I agree that since there is an abundance of medical terminology I should be more sensitive to what is considered "common knowledge" and add more hyperlinks. I will absolutely keep expanding on the article and trying to present the information in a clear and neutral tone. Thank you for such thoughtful insight and some great tips!

Lnmorton (talk) 02:38, 14 November 2018 (UTC)

Michelle's Peer Review
This article is fascinating and looks very well put together. For the next round of edits, try to find and add an image of Dr. Wallis. Be sure to put citations in the "Personal Life" section. I found the story about her mother fascinating. Some sentences are run-ons so I would look to condense. Awesome start and I look forward to reading the rest of the article!

Mausman22 (talk) 06:58, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

Response to Peer Review:

I have been desperately trying to locate a picture of Dr. Wallis to incorporate into the Wikipedia page. The only picture that I have located is on the American Medical Women's Association website. I have emailed the assistant director regarding the use of the photo on their page and received an email back saying that they are waiting to hear from the executive director for permission to use the picture. I completely agree that a picture of an individual is a very important aspect of a successful Wikipedia page. Thank you for the tip about run-on sentences, it has definitely always been a weak point in my writing. I will thoroughly review the article to check for run-ons. Thank you for the tips!

Lnmorton (talk) 02:33, 14 November 2018 (UTC)