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Testing! hehehehehehheheheheh Hi I.Love.Trees.Yes.I.Do (talk) 20:33, 23 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review: Critiques of degrowth

Critiques of the term degrowth You should source more of this section. It appears like much of it is your own opinion and not from the writing of authors in the field.

Reply by Étienne: I added citations.

“The authors that “degrowth” carries the opposite associations and that these automatic initial associations can bias the how the subsequent information on “degrowth” is integrated.”

This sentence is missing a word. Do you mean to say: The authors argue that “degrowth” carries the opposite associations and that these automatic initial associations can bias the how the subsequent information on “degrowth” is integrated.

Reply by Étienne: yes. fixed it, thanks.

The sentence with the 3rd critique of the term degrowth needs restructuring… it’s confusing.

Reply by Étienne: fixed it as well.

Critiques of the feasibility of the degrowth transition It looks like you have some good souces and case examples here, looking forward to reading the section when its done.

Reply by Étienne: done.

Dilemmas of degrowth - Why it seems in italics?

Reply by Étienne: removed the italics. It makes more sense with the Wikipedia format.

General Comments The general tone of your article feels more like a research essay instead of a neutral encyclopedia article. I understand that you are relying on a narrow body of sources and much of it is theoretical but I would suggest reading over the already posted suggests of the degrowth Wikipedia page and trying to emulate the more neutral tone there. I am really happy to review your article again closer to the final due date if you need someone to just check grammar or anything!

Reply by Étienne: I've tried to make the article more friendly to the average Wikipedia user and added citations to pretty much every sentence so that's it's 100% legit and not made up stuff.

Claireosanger (talk) 13:36, 2 April 2019 (UTC)

Étienne's reply Loftslag (talk) 16:37, 10 April 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
Étienne's reply: I added citations pretty much for every sentence. Étienne's reply: Now Chomsky fits better in the paragraph. Étienne's reply: Yeah I was obviously not done when you reviewed my article. Now the article is more balanced. Étienne's reply: Yep. No more "this paper". Étienne's reply: Good idea. I added them (not too many I hope). Étienne's reply: here it is!
 * This is going to be within the main degrowth article page right? Either way you should add a heading above the first sentence
 * The heading for critiques of the term degrowth should have degrowth in quotes like in the rest of the paragraph
 * I would add citations to the first few sentences of the critiques of the term section
 * The sentence “the second reason that “degrowth” can be …..” goes right into a quote by Chomsky – maybe break up that sentence? Or add a word/phrase that can bring the two ideas together, like “for example” or something
 * I also feel like you could elaborate on each of the reasons the term is critiqued
 * The critiques of feasibility section seems like an outline so I wont bother reviewing that – but I assume you won’t be saying “this paper”?
 * Can add a few links in there – e.g. growth, social justice, gender equality, etc
 * Excited to see what else you write! :)

-- I.Love.Trees.Yes.I.Do (talk) 00:42, 3 April 2019 (UTC) Étienne's reply:Loftslag (talk) 16:40, 10 April 2019 (UTC)