User talk:LoganFuchs/Personality development

Peer Review
There were very useful and important categories listed with good examples to help readers understand what each thing you were trying to include meant. I also think you have a good amount of useful sources and it’s clear a lot of effort was put into the outline of the article and trying to figure out everything that should be included in what affects personality development; I think it’s a good thing that you added both environmental and genetic factors as well, so both can be properly analyzed. The only thing I might add to each section is a little more detail. For example, with parenting styles you could explain each one instead of only two and for trauma and adversity where you stated “can have long-term effects on personality development” I think it would be valuable to have some statistics to back that up and explain it more in depth (like how they will interact with others in relationships or how they may view trust). Everything has a great outline and a great start (and I realize it’s only a rough draft), I just think it needs more numerical statistics and you could also add more than one reference to each section to support all of your claims when you add more body to each paragraph. JennahO (talk) 23:54, 26 March 2023 (UTC)


 * So instead of adding more detail just hyperlinked the childhood trauma wikipedia article that way if a reader wanted to learn more they could easily just click the hyperlink and learn more. There wasn’t very much statically data that I could find except in the genetics part so we will definitely look into adding more quantitative data. thank you for the input on more than one reference but all the information that I needed was included in the websites and articles that I have read. LoganFuchs (talk) 21:47, 6 April 2023 (UTC)

Peer Review
The body that is written in the group's draft so far has great additions. For parenting style, I appreciate how you included examples, but it could be improved by adding the other common parenting styles (neglectful and permissive I think are the other two) and their effects on an individual's development as well. I would also make sure that the examples included in the article are true effects that can be found in your cited sources rather than the outcomes we expect to support wiki's neutral and encyclopedic style. You have done a great job including examples from various areas that can influence one's development. The only thing to double check is to add sources to support your statements about the effects of these so they are not coming from opinion or observation. Although I agree with the statement about how understanding the impact of the experiences listed and how it can help promote healthy development, I am hesitant to say that this is not trying to persuade individuals, which is not the style of wikipedia. Maybe this is okay if your source states this as fact and can support this with research or studies as evidence. I appreciate that you included a section for genetics. I think it would be great to add more well-cited facts to this section to supplement the personality development article. Great additions so far, just double check that it is written as objective facts and not in a persuasive style. Keep up the good work. Emleejee (talk) 05:03, 27 March 2023 (UTC)


 * Thank you for reviewing our article draft and giving feedback. We have linked another article to an additional Wikipedia article about childhood trauma. We feel this is geared towards the neglectful parenting. Thank you for mentioning the persuasive style as we did not notice it before you mentioning this and can now reword what we have to make it not persuasive. Cheyanneking10 (talk) 21:47, 6 April 2023 (UTC)