User talk:LoganW501/sandbox

Content- Both pharaphrased pharagraph and the origional pharagraph are both the same length. I do believe that this source is very relevant to the article. It might be helpful to add more information to make the pharaphrased part longer and have more information. Organization- This addition is very well organized. It is easy to understand. Something that I think you should include is some more information about Kelly. I think you did a good job on not copying anything word for word. Tone- The tone used is the same as what I am used to reading/seeing on a wikipedia article! Sources-This source feels like it would be very reliable. Nice find! Aleighob2 (talk) 19:57, 22 February 2019 (UTC)