User talk:Lolamakombo/sandbox

Hello Lola,

The first thing I noticed when I glanced at your article is that you do not have any evident sections in your article. I totally know you are going to put them in the future, but it felt odd to read with no breaks.

Grammar: "The Cuban media are..." should actually be "The Cuban media is..." "In 2005 Cubans had at least and 3 million television sets, and the country had 169 AM, 55 FM, and 58 TV broadcasting stations." Correction: "In 2005, Cubans had at least 3 million television sets,..."

I am really interested in the topic of your article, on how the Cuban government controls media and utilizes the media to its own advantage. However, sections are needed. I am not sure if this is one section of your article or if the portion of the text that you provided is almost your whole article. The content you presented is informative, interesting, but is not being portrayed properly. The information almost seems listed.

I am not sure what questions you have for your article because you have not posted any, or I cannot see them. Essentially, just put sections because the information seems a bit all over the place.

Hi Lola,

I agree that you have a very interesting topic. As for headings, I would suggest having an intro that lays out the main ideas of your article. Maybe the next section could be Radio and Television and then have sub-sections of Radio During the Cuban Revolution, Radio Under Communist Party, and then maybe a section on TV since you had some information about that. Other than this I would suggest making your article more readable. I think it would help if you had paragraphs with a clear idea stated at the beginning so readers know what you are addressing.

-MaeveMrvitale (talk) 03:29, 11 April 2017 (UTC)Maeve