User talk:Lolbabycowboy/sandbox

Peer Review SF
This article is incredibly thorough and well researched, my only suggestion is to add hyperlinks to when you're talking about topics that aren't familiar. Really well done! SeenaBerkeley (talk) 05:07, 18 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you! I forgot we could do that! I will definetly add some to topics. Lolbabycowboy (talk) 06:37, 18 October 2022 (UTC)

Peer Review
I think this is an amazing article. There is so much information in here. It goes into detail on every paragraph. Sources look good. While that’s great, I feel as though the career section could be broken down in a few sections instead of one long career section. One idea I had was early adulthood, middle adulthood, and late adulthood. That’s just how I feel but keeping it as it is, is also good. Only other minor thing is a grammar error. She led the "Save the Beaches" campaign whose purpose was to open to public beaches in Southern California. Remove the second “to.” SealSquared (talk) 05:23, 18 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you so much for your feedback. I will look into the dates and break the career section down into 3 instead of one so it doesn't look as lengthy and helps the reader eadily navigate through the article. Lolbabycowboy (talk) 06:37, 18 October 2022 (UTC)