User talk:Lordakowski/sandbox

When you mention the Annapolis Conference, are you able to put the link directly in the subheading? It might look more aesthetically pleasing than having the words Main Article in your paragraph.

- Good intro with the civil war era. - I really like the headers for the article, it organizes it very well.

good work

The first sentence sounds a bit off — Preceding unsigned comment added by 18bethanyh (talk • contribs) 13:58, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

You could add to the section on the Naval Academy, as it seems to be an important part of Annapolis, and the current page does not go into much detail. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Crbrenner (talk • contribs) 14:18, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

This section is worded a bit awkwardly and could use re-wording- try not to use the phrase "would be": "In 1861, the first camp of three that would be built for holding paroled soldiers was created on the campus of St. John's College. The second location of Camp Parole would house over 20,000 and would be located where Forest Drive is currently. The third and final location was finished in late 1863 and would be placed near the Elkridge Railroad, as to make transportation of soldiers and resources easier before and allowing the camp to grow to it's highest numbers[2] " — Preceding unsigned comment added by Crbrenner (talk • contribs) 14:20, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

I would recommend adding a sentence to the beginning of the Civil War section just to set up the reader (something about Maryland's general connection to the Civil War)

When you get the chance, I would recommend just going through and removing some spaces between the periods and the citations and in some case adding spaces

A general note is that I would recommend adding at least one citation to each paragraph if you can (even if they are repeat citations)

Great job, I learned a lot :) - Deena — Preceding unsigned comment added by Deena.husami (talk • contribs) 14:31, 28 November 2018 (UTC)