User talk:LorenaPS

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Hello, LorenaPS, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Choosing an article
Hi Lorena, By now you should have some potential topics for the Wikipedia article you'd like to work on. Please check out the associated exercise (https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/training/students/choose-topic-exercise) and fill out the template on your user page (https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/redirect/sandbox/Choose_an_Article?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_choose_article) beanstash (talk) 13:23, 20 October 2022 (UTC)

Peer review -- Lucy T

 * The title says “wallace line” but is referred to as “wallace’s line” in the first sentence, so make sure the two are consistent with each other
 * The second sentence says “shown in grey” but there is no figure directly below the paragraph
 * The 1st sentence of the second paragraph is a run-on. Separate it into 2 separate sentences.
 * Delete the word “found” in the 2nd to last sentence of paragraph 2
 * Lead section contains relevant info and gives a good general description of the topic
 * Under “historical context”, where in the original drawing of the line referred to at the start of the section?
 * Make sure you put a space after every period!
 * “throughout” instead of “through” in the 1st sentence of the last paragraph in the Historical Context section
 * I liked the mention of all the different scientists in the Historical Context section! It created a clear and chronological structure for the section.
 * “remained” instead of “were maintained” in the 2nd to last sentence of the Biogeography section
 * “colonization” instead of “colonizations” in the 2nd to last sentence of the Zoogeography section
 * Information is presented well/clearly in the Zoogeography section
 * Add diagrams and figures (especially the ones you refer to in the article)!!

Lucienne.t (talk) 17:07, 29 November 2022 (UTC)

a few comments
This is really nicely written. A few brief comments and suggestions: In the historical context section, the first paragraph is quite long I think. I would suggest splitting it into two -- perhaps at "The proposal of the line, however, was not the main objective of Wallace’s endeavors"

"had ancestral colonizers that disappeared from the Lombok Strait" -- i'm not entirely sure I understand what "had" is supposed to mean here? Consider rewording.

in Zoogeography, "although their occurrence is derived from more recent colonization events" -- the antecedent of "their" isn't really clear here.

And in connection with the plants: "since their colonizations events differ" -- this is a bit wishy washy. How do their colonization events differ? beanstash (talk) 03:56, 3 December 2022 (UTC)