User talk:Lorisimms1/sandbox

Hi Lori,

I've looked over your article and have a couple of comments: 1) the opening gives a good summary about the subject matter of the book, but does not mention of all the subtopics to be discussed later in the article (i.e., treatment). 2) All citations refer to the notes section, but not the reference section, but the sources match up so adding page numbers to the references may be up to you. However, if a source is listed in the "Notes" section, it should also be in the references (i.e., Joseph J. Michaels, M.D. (1965). "The Mask of Sanity - Book Review" (PDF). Psychosomatic Medicine, Volume XXIV No. 5. pp. 489–490. Retrieved 2007-12-15.; Cameron, Deborah (1987). The Lust to Kill. Washington Square, NY: New York University Press. pp. 87–94. ISBN 0-8147-1408-0. ). 3) As far as technical jargon, the DSM is referred to and I would include the full name first before using the acronym. 4) The links are helpful in understanding other terms, but the link to French Language may not be necessary. It may be more useful to include a link that discusses the development of "manie sans delire" meaning. 7) I was a little unsure of the contribution, but assumed it was the "treatment" section. For this, I would give an example or two of the "associative behaviors" and include your citation. Otherwise, this section is a great addition to the article! 8) Some of the verb are past tense when the article begins with present tense. 9) There is good categorization. 10) Notable significance is clear. 13) The banner is on the page. Lewis.1395 (talk) 23:02, 30 March 2012 (UTC)