User talk:Louchi22

Proposed revisions to article

--For the first section of the article, I think the third paragraph is unnecessary. It looks out of the place. This wikipedia article is not focusing on the banning of the book but rather simply the book itself. I think one needs to work on the core of the book first and then slowly slide into its specifics (without giving hints here and there throughout). I would therefore take off that third paragraph and use it as the first paragraph of "Critical Interpretation". --I would merge "The critical interpretation","The controversy" and "Censorship" all in one paragraph. At the end of the last sentence of "The controversy", I'd put: "which is why The Absolutely True Diary of a Part-Time Indian (italic) has been at the center of several controversies regarding...etc" Under "Controversy", it says "Alexis responded to such complaints in a 2011 Wall Street Journal article entitled...etc". One needs to know what he's responding to. I'd add one or two sentences there explaining what the main idea was there. Change the title of the paragraph: "Social commentary and challenges" -I'd put "Sherman Alexie's Background and purpose" and "historical trauma of the spokane indians" all in one. -I would add three themes: 1)identity (reservation outcast + fancy white school basketball superstar). 2) home (reservation is home but also a prison, home is at the reservation but also in this new high school of his) 3) tradition (fry bread, funerals, the tradition that everyone on the reservation stays in the same place --> making it harder for Arnold to leave) - I would make the sentences shorter and fix some of the punctuation. First paragraph, for example: "after work by Alexie" add : or "Alexie is best known as being...etc" I would then take off the sentence afterwards because it seems too choppy and irrelevant. - I would make the language more sophisticated as well: "The Absolute True Diarty begins by introducing Junior's circumstances, including the fact that hew as born with..." (in the Plot section, second paragraph) --> not sophisticated enough, too long.

Hi, my name is Lara Laing. I am currently in a class which is centered on teaching students how to use Wikipedia. Consequently, using what I have learned, I would like to make some contributions to the article: I would firstly like to add a new section on "themes". I believe that a section on themes would be important here as themes permit to tie the depth of the book with the external plot. The themes I would talk about here are family, love and acceptance. -- I would take the "authors" part out of the "background" section and make it its own section and elaborate on it (placed after the background section). As of now, I believe that the section on the authors is too scrambled, and does not offer equal information on both authors. For example--> we are provided with information regarding Richardson's educational background but not Parnell's. Thus, I would write one small section on Richardson and one small section for Parnell making sure the information on both is equal and more complete. I would take off the "motivation for writing the novel" within the author section and include that within what is said in the second paragraph of the "proposed value" section. Both of these "parts" revolve around the motivation/purpose of the authors, so combining them would make sense and save space for other ideas! As a consequence, the author section will be more focused on the lives + accomplishments of the authors. -- Within the "background" section once again, I would take off the "scientific explanations" section because I find it irrelevant regarding the book as a whole. It does not fundamentally matter what "homosexual behavior" can be defined as for animals. It does not add anything to the understanding of the book as a whole. - I will change the "reception" part of the wikipedia page, and rename it "censorship cases", because I find it to be a more relevant title. - I am going to copyedit the "plot summary" and cut down the censorship cases of Iowa and Illinois because they are too long.

BIBLIOGRAPHY:

https://www.nypl.org/blog/2013/09/23/banned-books-week-and-tango-makes-three http://www.telegraph.co.uk/culture/books/booknews/11532897/Gay-penguins-have-no-place-in-our-libraries-say-parents.html http://www.ala.org/aasl/sites/ala.org.aasl/files/content/aaslpubsandjournals/slr/vol14/SLR_PerceptionsofSelf_V14.pdf http://www.nbcnews.com/id/15764474/ns/us_news-education/t/gay-penguins-have-place-school-libraries/ https://scholar.lib.vt.edu/ejournals/ALAN/v40n1/fanetti.html http://www.pbs.org/wgbh/americanexperience/features/banned-and-tango-makes-three/ https://scholar.lib.vt.edu/ejournals/ALAN/v40n1/fanetti.html https://www.teachingchildrenphilosophy.org/BookModule/AndTangoMakesThree http://www.slj.com/2007/05/censorship/and-tango-makes-three-prompts-serious-challenge-in-massachusetts-school/

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