User talk:Louishill98/sandbox

My Response to Their Peer Review


 * Implement an Cupcakke and the LGBT Community section
 * Compare and Contrast Cupcakke and another female rap artists
 * Tie Cupcakke into my generations view of social issues
 * Utilize some class resources into the article — Preceding unsigned comment added by Louishill98 (talk • contribs) 21:18, 29 April 2018 (UTC)

Jaela's Peer Review

I appreciated the discourse about her songs and citing critics interpretations of her songs. The lead paragraphs are informative and now I know a little more about Cupcakke and what her music is about. I also think talking about how she represents a generational view of social issues would nice to be talked about because young people are her main fan base. Great job!

Vicky's Peer Review

Peer review Response

•Is the topic of the article clear? - Yes •Is it clearly related to class content? - The article focuses on a specific artist but has the potential to relate to class content.

•Does the lead paragraph explain the importance of the topic? •Does the lead paragraph cover all aspects presented in subheadings? - Currently,I like all the ideas you have (especially expanding on how Cupcakke has been unapologetically herself). A suggestion is to include some themes (sections) on black feminism or “Cupcake & the LGBT Community” and then talk about how she has liberated them to embrace their truth.

•Are the sections organized well, in a sensible order? Would they make more sense presented some other way (chronologically, for example)? - Organization on both articles is currently organized well. •Do the sections make clear how the article is related to class content? - Right now the Wikipage is mainly an biography about her. A suggestion would be to include themes of black feminism/ the black female narrative and have sections that directly tie together her career and the themes we learn in class.

•Which class texts might the student use and where? - Beyoncé Knowles, Lemonade - Julia Baird “How Beyoncé is Re-Branding Feminism” - Jamila Woods, “Blk Girl Soldier” (2016) - Barbara Ransby, “Hollywood Won’t Save Us: Instead, Let’s Build a Revitalized Radical Feminism” •Can you recommend other scholarly sources or authors the student should consult? - As of now, I don’t have many other scholarly sources but your ideas are great and Im excited to read the finished product.

Zoë's Peer Review
It is great how the lead section offers insight into how the article topics are going to develop. I also enjoyed all of the connected hyperlinks to other pages for easy access for the reader. I would suggest reviewing the article for so far typos to improve its professionalism which I believe adds to how individuals review the article for accuracy. I enjoyed all of the specific examples in the article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zoerobinson3 (talk • contribs) 01:12, 30 April 2018 (UTC)

Article Evaluation: Claudette Colvin I chose to evaluate the Claudette Colvin's wikipedia page because I think it applies to our class readings on intersectionality and the importance of understandign and realizing that things such as class, race, age, gender, sexuality, ethnicity are intertwined and affect eachother. Claudette was originally the first one to deny her seat on the bus, but because of the fact that she was "too young", and pregnant that they didn't want to use her as an symbol of the civils rights movement. Claudette was a participant of the Browder vs Gayle an influential case about bus segregation laws. This article used alot of first hand accounts and quotes from Claudette and her classmates about the incidents that happened and how Claudette felt about segregation laws. The use of testimonials added volume and emotional power to this wikipedia, but it detracted from the facts of the incident. The article comes off as neutral since its just presenting the incidents and recounts the experiences from the individuals involved I checked the citations and the links work and bring me to relevent information about the Browder v Gayle case and Claudette. The talk page of this wikipedia page brings up some issues regardering the pregnancy of Claudette and the appropriate use of the term "hobos" This page goes along well with the theme of erasure of black women involved in movements, and their impacts regarding social change that aren't readily talked about our discussed in academic spaces. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Louishill98 (talk • contribs) 23:48, 3 May 2018 (UTC)