User talk:Loulii/Hind Al-Eryani/KJCross Peer Review

Peer review

Hi Leeza, your entry is very well detailed and I think you have a great outline of your subject's life and achievements.

Lead

I think your lead is very well written and detailed about the subject. You included a long description for the subject that keep the reader engaged and interested in the life and achievements of your subject. Everything in the Lead is also in the article. Your Lead is just the right amount of words and is long and detailed, but in a brief and concise way, well done!

Content

The content is extremely relevant to the topic, I think this woman has experienced a lot and in different but yet similar fields. You accurately go into details about her achievements and awards, but also include important information about how she acquired that honour. I think you should try to find an article from 2023 for your subject, because the furthest it goes is to 2021, and I think it would be helpful in keeping your entry as current as possible. This subject falls into a category of underrepresented women, I think it's so important to write about her and teach others about her life and advocacy, great job!

Tone and Balance

The tone and the way the content is presented is in a neutral tone. There are no present biases or guide for a certain position or side to take. I think there are parts of her personal life that could be added, perhaps her upbringing is a little underrepresented. The content doesn't try to persuade the reader in any way, I think this is your strength, because the reader will find themselves to be voluntary interested in engaging and wanting to learn more. The reader can also for their own opinions and there's room for their interest to build.

Sources and References

I think your references are great, I see you've included articles that aren't in English, I think your strength is being able to utilize a variety of sources. I think you should look into some more sources only if there is any, but only to further enrich what you already have. Like I mentioned previously, if you can include topics of her personal life and upbringing more, I think that would really help tie everything together. You have a good variety of new and old sources that help build a strong timeline of your subject's achievements. I think you have a strength in taking what the authors of the articles write and paraphrase in a way that makes the subject tone neutral. I think you should just double check you're not using and primary sources.

Organization Your content is very well written, perhaps you should do a quick grammar check to be sure everything is properly written before publishing. There are a couple errors in punctuation and spelling. Your sections are broken down nicely and well structured. Also in the Lead, there's "Article Body" left at the bottom of the paragraph.

Images and Media

You don't have any photos, I think one or two could be useful to help the reader visualize the subject.

New Article Section

Yes the subject is notable and the sources help to support that. I think you can link more wikipedia entries to your subject. It can be useful to have more linked content. You should also further develop your infobox.

Overall Impressions

My overall impression is that you are very passionate about your subject and also about wikipedia. You stay true to keeping the wikipedia format and you can follow the structure really well. I'm given the impression that this is not your first wikipedia, because it's really well done. I think you could add some photos to make the page more lively and provide visuals for the reader. You make great use of your sources and resources.