User talk:Lpetroia/sandbox

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Nice work on your article draft, but one of the key things to remember when writing an encyclopaedia article is that you don't use the first or second person - if you find yourself saying "I", "we", or "you", you're on the wrong track.

A couple other things - references and links don't belong in section headers, so this one, and the one below it, need to change: User:Lpetroia/sandbox At the same time, everything in the article need to be clearly connected with a supporting citation. At the very minimum, each paragraph should have one reference, and there shouldn't be any text after the final reference in a section. That way, the reader can always connect a statement with the supporting source. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:25, 12 May 2016 (UTC)