User talk:Lpwarner/sandbox

Laurence's peer review
Notes- Lead in Section- The sentence you added to the lead in section is slightly confusing. I would suggest explaining terms like "proprietary software" or "Hootsuite" so readers who do not know them can still consume the information you're presenting.

Structure- The article progresses in a relatively straightforward way. As you make more additions, there may be a need to add subsections to "Surveillance". Other than that the structure is relatively intuitive.

Balanced Content/Reliable Sources- Balancing the content here seems like it will be difficult. It is obvious that Facebook surveils us but the tone of some of the article and your additions do not appear neutral. Though I am not sure this is avoidable. Furthermore, I would suggest a great number of sources. Your sources are great but there obviously will be more as you add on to the page. There is also a dire need for sourcing in the sections already in the page.

Overall Impression- Good start! I would suggest more sources and a little more explanation regarding the terms you use in the article. These additions will add to the length of your edits and make them more clear. Good work Laurence.

Potential additions
(Note for grading: this isn't a full peer review, I've done that for other articles but I have a few suggestions for potential additions here)

Your changes make a lot of sense! I think it would help to add a few more academic sources—there has been a lot of interesting research on understanding how the news feed algorithm works and how users think it works. One person to look up is Motahhare Eslami (UIUC), a couple of her papers talk about user perceptions of the news feed. It might also be worth looking into some psychology papers about psychological impact of the newsfeed (there have been quite a few that have gotten significant media coverage, so my guess is they won't be too hard to find). Finally, I think it's worth mentioning more recent changes FB has made to attempt to reduce the spread of misinformation, and I would imagine there's also been academic research around tracking the spread of information and fake news.

Weinshel (talk) 19:16, 16 November 2018 (UTC)