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Posted this on the Malaysian Americans talk page: The Malaysian American identity often stands less prominent against the myriad of Asian American identities in the United States. As already briefly described in the existing page, Malaysia as a country itself is diverse and is home to people of various ethnicities (namely Malay, Chinese, Indian and Indigenous), therefore it is often that many Malaysians who migrate to the United States identify more strongly with their ethnicity (e.g. as Chinese or Indian American) rather than their previous citizenship. Furthermore, Malaysians only started immigrating to the United States much later compared to many other Asian ethic groups in history, thus smaller in population and often recognition in comparison to other Asian-American groups. Although this may seem to disqualify this group from having it's own Wikipedia page, it may be an interesting starting point. It would be beneficial to explain and give context on how race and religious relations stemming from pre-colonial and British colonial times, contributed to the migration and assimilation of Malaysians into the United States (a link to a related wikipedia page may be included). The term "Malaysian American" could also be discussed in a separate section to clarify its connotations and implications. In addition, details can be added on the arrival of Malaysians into America, Malaysian American culture (or the even lack thereof) and a link to notable Malaysian Americans. More developed wikipedia pages on other Asian American groups will be consulted to help form appropriate structure and content for this page. The extracts on Malaysian American identity in the following sources will also be consulted: Encyclopedia of Asian American Folklore and Folklife [3 volumes] (by Lee, Jonathan; Nadeau, Kathleen; Lee, Jonathan H X); Asian American history and culture : an encyclopedia (edited by Huping Ling and Allan Austin) Armonk, N.Y. : M.E. Sharpe, 2010; Asian American Culture [2 volumes]: From Anime to Tiger Moms (Cultures of the American Mosaic) (by Lan Dong). Any suggestions, critiques or resources will be greatly appreciated. Lsim2 (talk) 17:35, 14 October 2016 (UTC)lsim2

Hi Lina!

I made a few edits, like deleting double words or simplifying sentences. Feel free to look at the editing history to see what changes I made.

A few other notes: I think the first sentence of your "Early Immigrants" section may have a grammatical error: "due to their small population"

"As Malaysia only gained independence from British colonial administration in 1957, most early Malaysian immigrants would have not identified with country of origin, but with ethnic identity, which is  still a common practice today." This sentence sounds a little awkward. Consider restructuring it: For example.) "As Malaysia only gained independence from British colonial administration in 1957, most early Malaysian immigrants would have not identified with their country of origin, but rather with their ethnic identites. This is still a common practice today."

In the second sentence of "The Malay Race" consider rephrasing the part that says "western states of the United States" to avoid repeating the word 'states'

In the Demography section, maybe consider making a table or chart? The age breakdown is a little confusing with all the numbers.

"Only in recent years has Malaysian heritage been acknowledged." Acknowledged by whom? By Malaysian Americans themselves?

The language section seems a little redundant because of points made in the assimilation section. Consider merging the two?

I would also suggest breaking up the history section. The first part is on Malaysian American history in the US and the second part spends more time on the history of Malaysia. Try making a distinction between the two parts

Sarah Perumattam (talk) 18:38, 2 December 2016 (UTC)Sarah

Sarah's review is much more detailed than mine. Anyways, overall, you did a superb job capturing the different eras of Malaysian migration as well as the complexity of such an identity. I would suggest adding more citations to some of the information you have, including but not limited to: o	“Many foreign-born Malaysian Americans also do not have American citizenship as Malaysia prohibits dual citizenship” o	“The New Economic Policy seemed to only favor…” o	“most Malaysian immigrants resettle in the United States for economic reasons”

I'm not sure you already done this already but I think it might be helpful to look at other Asian American pages to see what you can add. Anyways, take everything I wrote with a grain of salt. Xchang20 (talk) 19:28, 2 December 2016 (UTC)