User talk:Luciusap/sandbox

Link internal links for -parent company -link once per subsection -link to leather goods, accessories Try to expand the information about the important people and see in any can be linked to other Wikipedia articles. look for an image of the founder or a picture of their building.

Feedback for Alexis
I would add more external links and citations for your sources. I like the lead, it gives a strong overview and idea about the entire article. I like the way the sections are put together, for example how they are based off of specific brand. I would try and find more information that are specifically about the topic of Tapestry Inc. I think overall the articles progress is really great and is in good shape. Griesejn (talk) 17:12, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Lead The lead is good and very informative. I would add internal links and citations to your lead section. Organizations The organization of your page is very good. The article has good flow to it. Tone The tone of your article doesn't seem biased or like you are promoting their products so that is good. I would however add more citations and internal links so people have an easier time verifying what you are saying. Balance The balance seems to be good between sections but I would try to add more to the section about Stuart Weitzman becasue its not as large as the other two and all three look like they could be expanded a little more. References Your references seem to be good. Abigayle UC Account (talk) 16:36, 24 October 2018 (UTC)

Check on your capitalization of names. Kate Spades name is not capitalized in her paragraph. Abigayle UC Account (talk) 16:39, 24 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback For alexis
Lead Section: This section is well written and you used of the current events that are going on with this company well. In-text citations are used well in this section allowing for readers to find out more about the individual companies that made up this new company.

Organization: In your history section, If you move the Stuart Weitzman section before the Kate Spade section you will make it more chronological since Stuart Weitzman was bought out in 2015 and Kate Spade was bought out in 2017.

Balance: The article is very well balanced.

Tone: The overall tone on this article is neutral not leaning into any personal or commercial overtones

References: Include an in-text citation on the Name Kate Spade in History so that readers can learn more about the designer more easily through your article. Dennisbt (talk) 16:56, 26 October 2018 (UTC)