User talk:Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation

Your submission at Articles for creation: Glioblastoma Foundation (October 3)
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 Qcne  (talk)  19:01, 3 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Thank you! I'll make the change to my user account immediately! I'll request help from an outside source to fix the biased nature of the draft! Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation (talk) 19:58, 3 October 2023 (UTC)

Paid Editing Disclosure
Hi @Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation.

Thanks for declaring your conflict of interest with your article draft.

You also need to make a paid editing disclosure immediately, see WP:PAID.

Let me know if you have any questions,  Qcne  (talk)  19:02, 3 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Thank you! I'll make the change to my user account immediately! I'll request help from an outside source to fix the biased nature of the draft! Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation (talk) 19:59, 3 October 2023 (UTC)
 * I've made changes to my draft! Would you be so kind as to check if my edits fall in line with what you suggested? Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation (talk) 13:38, 4 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Hi @Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation. It's better, but not acceptable yet. Some examples of WP:PEACOCK phrasing include... prominent, mission to revolutionize, leading edge, renowned. You need to write completely dispassionately. I imagine you're in the PR or marketing department, which means you probably have lots of experience writing press releases - but a central pillar of Wikipedia is that everything must be written in a completely neutral way.
 * On a totally separate note, you also have some issues with your sources. In order to prove notability under our WP:NORG criteria, we need to see significant coverage of the charity in multiple published independent, reliable, secondary sources. This means not things like interviews, press releases, etc. Quite a few of your sources are interviews with CEO Kwatra, which isn't going to establish notability. We'd need to see some further sources that are editorially independent of the charity.  Qcne  (talk)  13:45, 4 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Okay thank you! Is there a resource that wikipedia authors use to have people who have no ties to the topic reword and fix up the article? Is there a paid or free service that could make it neutral and more encyclopedic? Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation (talk) 20:31, 4 October 2023 (UTC)
 * @Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation we don't really do co-editing services, as we're all volunteers with limited amounts of time on our hands. There are paid editing services but these are not endorsed by Wikipedia, and I would not recommend you purchase their services as there are a lot of scams going around.
 * New editors writing articles from scratch is a common mistake, our standards are high and our policies and guidelines complex. I'm not saying this to discourage you, but also I don't want you to waste your time and become frustrated with our (indeed, byzantine!) workflows.
 * Organisations also often task their marketing departments to write a Wikipedia article in order to promote their org. If this is the case with you, I'd recommend having a read of WP:BOSS which explains some of the problems with this way of writing.
 * If you still want to forge ahead with the draft, I'd recommend reading and understanding the following:
 * - WP:NPOV
 * - WP:VERIFY
 * - WP:NORG
 * Hope that helps,  Qcne  (talk)  11:04, 5 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you! You've been a great help! I'll look into those! 104.169.29.122 (talk) 13:18, 5 October 2023 (UTC)
 * -Lucy Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation (talk) 13:18, 5 October 2023 (UTC)
 * I've made some more changes! I got rid of the peacock phrasing and used different references! Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation (talk) 14:30, 5 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Hi again @Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation. I know we said we don't do co-editing, but I had some free time this evening so have gone through the article and did quite a bit of further removal of non-neutral language, and shuffled about some of the sections. I hope you can see the difference in tone now.
 * I also added two maintenance tags (in italics) which point out areas where a source is required. Simply find a source and add it in and replace the tag.
 * I also think it would be good to see one more source that is independent of the foundation, not a charity database, and not a press release, which discusses the charity. Perhaps a newspaper discussing the opening of the charity, something about its history, something which provides some analysis or interpretation.  Qcne   (talk)  20:06, 5 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much!! You're incredible! I'll start filling in those sources! Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation (talk) 20:08, 5 October 2023 (UTC)
 * I've made those changes! Do yo think it's ready for resubmission? Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation (talk) 13:24, 9 October 2023 (UTC)
 * I think it just about squeaks through, so have accepted it. It would be useful to add more WP:CATEGORIES on it, too.  Qcne  (talk)  14:48, 9 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Okay! Thank you so much for all of your help! Lucycollins glioblatomafoundation (talk) 15:55, 9 October 2023 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Glioblastoma Foundation has been accepted
 Glioblastoma Foundation, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created.

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Thanks again, and happy editing!  Qcne  (talk)  14:47, 9 October 2023 (UTC)