User talk:Lukemcclain/sandbox

Weston's Peer Review
This looks like a good start to a detailed article, with good organization and information. I like that it is organized in chronological order and that there isn't a single section that doesn't have at least one source. If I could offer one suggestion, it would be to provide a longer introduction and then links to the rest of the article with an outline, so that people can skip to the specific tribes, but I'm sure you will add that as your article progresses. Overall, a solid framework for you to add more information onto.

Caleb Ringger's Peer View
This article has a lot of really good details. I'd recommend getting a few more sources, as one of the red flags that reviewers look for is when an article only has a couple sources. The content is great and super thorough, my only suggestions would be to talk more specifically about what the Land Rush was or at least provide a link to the existing wikipedia article about the Land Rush, a topic I feel like your average reader wouldn't be familiar with (such as myself). The tone of the article reads a little bit like a narrative which I don't think is necessarily bad but maybe try to present it more like an encyclopedia rather than a story if that makes sense. But overall it's great, my favorite section was the one about African Americans in Indian territory because it's a pretty fascinating look into something I had never really thought or heard about before. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ringgerc (talk • contribs) 04:33, 24 March 2019 (UTC)