User talk:Lushiyi81/sandbox

Keonho's peer review
Hello I looked over your article and i enjoyed learning about Penicillium commune however i like to make some suggestion that may help you. First of all, you should add another heading for 'disease' because as you mentioned in the article, Penicillium commune are usually found in food products mainly on cheese. It will be interesting for readers like me to know what kind of disease Penicillium commune can cause since we are daily consuming food products and highly involved. When you are doing the research, you may also ask yourself these questions: Does Penicillium commune cause severe effects from food spoilage? If not what are the symptoms? What are therapeutic methods? In history and taxonomy section, information about history and taxonomy of Penicillium commune were clearly stated with proper reference. In growth and morphology section, you may do more research and be more specific by stating what caused faster growth of Penicillium commune on CSN medium, slower growth on MEA medium, and restricted growth in CYA plates because as we learned in our lecture, different mediums that Penicillium commune was on may contain different concentration of macro or micronutrients for their essential fungal growth. You can also back up your information about difference in Penicillium commune growth in different medium with statistical information. When i went through your references, this journal included the information about difference in growth rate of Penicillium commune with statistical significance so you should check it out. https://www.openagrar.de/servlets/MCRFileNodeServlet/Document_derivate_00008864/1986_Leistner_Food-Microbiol_363ff.pdfP). In physiology section, there is a paragraph that describes different temperature affecting on Penicillium commune which overlaps with growth and morphology section therefore i suggest to insert that paragraph into growth and morphology section instead. Overall, the article was clear and specific with proper references. Good luck on your final draft! KeonHoKim (talk) 00:06, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review- Hanna
Hi Lushiyi81, I read about your fungus, Penicillium commune and I really enjoyed learning about your fungus and I really thought your outline is really well organized. However, I do have some suggestions that I can give you to improve your final article! First, on you growth and morphology section, you said "Penicillium commune can be distinguished by its fast growth on CSN while showing a slow growth rate on MEA and restricted growth on CzA and CYA plates." I recommend you to link these words to other wikipedia page that describes the words by highlighting the word or may be briefly describe about it. Second of all, I notice that you never mentioned about sexual or asexual reproduction of your fungus. I think it will be a good idea to include how they are reproducing in your growth and morphology section as well. Also, as Keonho suggested, I also think that you should move your paragraph in your physiology section into growth and morphology section. I suggest you to put what is the mechanisms that they use to produce their secondary metabolites or mycotoxins. Lastly, on your habitat and ecology section, I think you already mentioned that they grow indoors and their main habitat is on food and cause food spoilages in your intro section. If I were you, instead of focusing on their habitat, I would focus on human/animal related disease caused by Penicillium commune or any risk factors for infection. But overall, it was great and interesting! Good job and I hope this comment helped. Good Luck!(Changh12 (talk) 21:18, 27 October 2017 (UTC))

Nav's Peer Review
Hello!

Overall, your article is really impressive and well put together. I would be careful when describing the physiology of the fungi and it's mycotoxins in detail when you introduce them in the lead. This may lead to redundancy in the future heading "Physiology". In addition, in the lead you have a hyperlink for "regulovasine" that is encoded to a page that doesn't exist, so I'm not sure if you necessarily need that hyperlink.

I would also be careful when describing the growth phases and the different morphology of Penicillium commune. Possibly for your final article, add a more clear distinction of which morphology it predominates in first, and then organize it in a fashion where you describe the varying colours it shows up as in different media. To do this you could add different paragraphs in this section: colours in media and conidiophore morphology.

You talk about how colonies on CzA and CYA show as a cream-ish dull yellow to brown yellow and that it is also observed as a purple. But there is no explanation as to why they also show as a purple colour on the reverse. Is it mentioned why?

I really enjoyed reading your article and can't wait to see what the final product looks like! Navlall (talk) 14:42, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

Some suggestions

 * referencing looks OK
 * formatting looks OK
 * content is good and thorough
 * try to use common words instead of scientific jargon (e.g., velutinous, floccose, fasciculate, etc.)
 * watch subject-verb agreement (e.g., there has been -> there have been)
 * instead of referring to the “reverse”, its better to say the underside of the colony when it is grown in a Petri dish
 * well done so far!

Medmyco (talk) 19:25, 17 November 2018 (UTC)