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"Eating more dairy can aid in fat loss" section should probably include more than one source to cite the information since it is an entire paragraph. Jtumina (talk) 16:58, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

This sentence "In these studies, a high calcium intake is considered 2300 mg and a low calcium intake is considered 700 mg." is not necessary; it might be too detailed for the overall discussion. The previous sentence did a good job of getting the point across. Jamiewang47 (talk) 17:01, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

"There is several misconception among health professionals and people in general when talking about weight loss." First sentence in the Facts and Fallacies (Myths) section needs editing for grammatical errors. Jtumina (talk) 17:03, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Consider adding more internal links to other Wikipedia changes to aid readers in understanding jargon used; especially in the "2) A low protein diet is best for weight loss" section. Jtumina (talk) 17:05, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

"Studies have shown that a diet high in dairy decreases total body fat. This occurs because a high amount of dietary calcium increases the amount of energy and fat excreted from the body. Studies have shown that saturated, monounsaturated and polyunsaturated fats all have a higher excretion rate with a high calcium intake. In these studies, a high calcium intake is considered 2300 mg and a low calcium intake is considered 700 mg. A possible explanation to this phenomenon is that high intakes of calcium cause calcium soap formation and/ or binding of bile acids in the intestine. Other studies specifically show that dairy sources of calcium demonstrate greater weight loss than supplemental calcium intake. This may be due to the other bioactive components present in milk, which may aid in metabolic efficiency and fat loss. The accuracy of this statement remains controversial. Since most natural dairy products contain fat content, there is a common understanding that this may cause weight gain. In addition, dairy contains some key ingredients such as whey protein and combinations protein/calcium that have a positive effect on satiety, increases energy loss, and finally assists weight loss." I feel as if the paragraph here needs significant work. Many scientific statements and claims that could be interpreted as subjective are made here with minimal, if any, evidence to support them or citations backing them up. Furthermore, speculation is made in the paragraph as to the potential causes of the results of the study/studies mentioned, speculation that is not backed up by any internal or external evidence. I recommend that this section be partially rewritten to make the evidence for your argument (and the sources from which that evidence is drawn) more clearly presented. Douglas Firs (talk) 17:06, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

The first paragraph is mostly scientific facts and should all be backed up with citations – just having one citation at the end of the paragraph doesn't seem like enough. The sentence "The accuracy of this statement remains controversial" also feels like it needs more explanation. You could maybe research and cite articles that disagree with this statement and add in more explanation as to why this statement's accuracy is controversial. The first sentence of the "Facts and Fallacies (Myths) section should be corrected so that the subject is plural. I also think the section should be named "Facts and Fallacies" or "Myths," not both. "Misconceptions" would also be a really good title for this section. I'm not sure whether you're intending to add more to the "Weight lifting is good for fat loss" section, but just wanted to bring it to your attention as something you should either add to or remove since there's nothing there at the moment. Ilena p (talk) 17:19, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

"Studies have shown that saturated, monounsaturated and polyunsaturated fats all have a higher excretion rate with a high calcium intake. In these studies, a high calcium intake is considered 2300 mg and a low calcium intake is considered 700 mg." If you are going to keep this information I think you should add another citation in this paragraph to strengthen your claim. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rasophia (talk • contribs) 17:26, 28 November 2018 (UTC)