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The article looks very organized, and you did a great job with the article formatting and reference formatting. On the “Writings” section, you should include the date of her essays and her fiction work if you know the publish and release date because the readers may be curious about when each of her works are published and released to the public. I made some minor edits. I suggest you to include her college degrees if she has any.

Bibliography

About Vanessa. (n.d.). Retrieved November 15, 2017, from http://www.vanessamartir.com/about-vanessa.html

Bishop, M. (2014, September 12). Secrets, Chokeholds, and the Sprouting of Wings: Latina Writer Sparkles. Retrieved November 15, 2017, from https://www.huffingtonpost.com/melanie-bishop/secrets-chokeholds-and-th_b_5799520.html

Lee, C. H. (2016, March 21). Smoke and Mirrors: an Interview with Vanessa Mártir. Retrieved November 15, 2017, from http://www.smokelong.com/smoke-and-mirrors-an-interview-with-vanessa-martir/

Schwartz, J. (2017, June 09). First Sentence Interview Series with Vanessa Mártir: “You have to make time”. Retrieved November 15, 2017, from https://www.jenaschwartz.com/first-sentence-interview-series-with-vanessa-martir-you-have-to-make-time/

Stevens, K. (2016, April 21). The Wolf Will Survive: A Conversation with Author Vanessa Mártir. Retrieved November 15, 2017, from https://discover.wordpress.com/2016/04/21/the-wolf-will-survive-a-conversation-with-author-vanessa-martir/

Vanessa Mártir. (n.d.). Retrieved November 15, 2017, from https://bindercon.com/speaker/vanessa-martir/

Peer Review
I think what you have so far is really great. You have great sources and information, and you've separated the information a bit, which makes it much easier to read. I would actually work on that first paragraph more and split it up a bit. Maybe one section for her early life and schooling and then another that discusses her works. I felt like the list of works was a bit abrupt because there wasn't much beforehand on the works. Maybe try to find sources that discuss the topics of the works (not reviews or opinions, but just facts about the essays and works of fiction) to help the reader understand more about what she writes about. I also think you could go more into "Defying Devastation: Bushwick in the 1980s". I think that would be a good topic to expand on. Googling that exhibition will give you more sources that discuss what the exhibition is about. Overall, I think going into more detail is all that this article needs.

Really nice work!

Audreyspell (talk) 18:39, 10 October 2018 (UTC)

Sam's Peer Review
Your article is definitely off to a great start! I suggest making two revisions, however:editing out the article evaluation and adding additional biographical information o nyour author. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sdallaire (talk • contribs) 01:50, 17 October 2018 (UTC)