User talk:Lweggs/sandbox

The author is improving the Parelaphostrongylus tenuis Wikipedia article. P. tenuis is a parasitic nematode that primarily affects white-tailed deer. The author expands on the Diagnosis, Implications, and Other Susceptible Animals sections and improves the organization of the article. The author could consider adding a sentence in the Diagnosis section to transition to talking about how to diagnose different animals. It can be very simple: Diagnosis methods vary by animal. The author can include other animals if there are good sources available, but if this becomes a lengthy list the author should select the most important or representative diagnoses. It could be helpful for the author to change the Implications heading to something more descriptive. The section discusses the geographic changes in moose and deer populations and the heading Implications should be more specific to that. The content in the section Other susceptible animals may make more sense when the different types of diagnoses are being discussed, since this is by animal and the section is already so short. The author could include that fact that many animals are susceptible but their diagnosis may not be known in the Diagnosis section. Alternatively, the author could reorganize the article to have what animals are susceptible as one of the first sections in the article before the Diagnosis section. It is unclear whether the references are acceptable because they do not show up in the References section. The author should make sure that the references can be seen and are in the correct numerical order before publishing on Wikipedia, and that the references are not from singular studies but reviews. Some minor notes, there is a typo in the first sentence, it should say "does" and "P. tenuis". Locations like Northeastern and Southeastern should be capitalized and P. tenuis is not always italicized in the article. Kgilbertnu (talk) 18:56, 5 April 2019 (UTC)