User talk:M02000297/sandbox

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You have presented a lot of information here, however, I noticed that you do not have any section headers. These would help separate your comments and messages to us, from your Piaget on Education rough draft. Also, I did not see your bibliography in your sandbox, which might help you cite your sources in a "wiki-style format". Aside from that there were only a couple of punctuation, spacing, (paragraph 3, sentence 4) and APA errors, such as putting "pp," instead of "p." in front of a page number in the fourth sentence of your first paragraph and the third sentence in your second. It looks like you are definitely heading in the right direction though. Continue working hard and doing such a great job!

GabiMclaugh92 (talk) 05:48, 15 July 2015 (UTC)

Gabi covered most of the editing issues that I noticed. I also mentioned to Daina that a heading needs to only have the first word capitalized. So yours would say Piaget on education. It would also be good to use he/she anytime you use a gender pronoun. Keep up the good work!

A reynolds (talk) 18:26, 16 July 2015 (UTC)

New Feedback
Good job! I really like the example you gave of a child pretending a banana is a telephone. I fixed a few minor and spelling errors in the third and fourth paragraphs. The transition into your last paragraph came off as a bit sudden to me. Is there any way you can make that transition flow a bit smoother? GabiMclaugh92 (talk) 15:19, 23 July 2015 (UTC)

Final Feedback
Martita, My Internet is going in and out - thanks Comcast. It looks like my note to proceed did not get saved. I apologize for not checking sooner. You are indeed READY to move your expansion into the main article.PsycTeacher (talk) 18:46, 23 July 2015 (UTC) Thanks for the note. I was just about to email you about it. M02000297 (talk) 19:19, 23 July 2015 (UTC)