User talk:M1996G/sandbox

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Nice work, M1996G! Keep working to make your entry leaner: anything that is even slightly repetitious should be eliminated. And, more importantly, make sure your language is as neutral as possible. Words such as "victory" take a side. "Early bumps" assumes a particular perspective. I know this can be one of the more challenging things to do, but it is an important skill to develop. I look forward to your refinements of this. --Jbdolphin (talk) 19:43, 28 April 2021 (UTC)